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Take A Breath
Contributed by
xxbreathlessx
on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 10:45:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Taking a breath , inhaling,
My tears are cradled in the night’s arms.
Iridescent lights hold me hopeful
As the wind sways me from thought to thought,
As the night hides me
Between its different shades of anger
And embraces each and every one of my faults.
Keeping our secret between the stars and
feeling the drops of lost wishes,
Knowing all the hopefuls dreams
Will never become real,
So close, yet so far from tasting the riche’s
Jewels that you never get a chance to really feel alive,
Unless the night holds you
As your broken into pieces and cry,
Feeling its warmth and anger
You cradle yourself with your own thoughts
Keep crying to the nights sky to feel anything but pain,
To feel nothing.
But the night just holds you,
Just hides you,
Just stares at your broken pieces,
And you know between those tears
And loss understanding
That somehow you’ll make it,
if not then you wouldn’t be here,
Exhaling.
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xxbreathlessx
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2005-07-14 22:45:27]
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Re: Take A Breath
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 14th July 2005 @ 11:30:07 PM AEST
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| I love this poem! Great Write:) It is so sad, it brought tears to my eyes...read some of my poems, they arent as well written as yours but they r still pretty sad -tiny_tunes89 |
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Re: Take A Breath
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 02:48:17 PM AEST
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this is a good peice, though its very dark.. of course, so is life, far too often. im glad you know it ends up in the light though, as your optomistic end reminds me.. poetically, this is a neat write. i love your imagery, especially near the beginning, like "the wind sways me from thought to thought". i feel the hopeless mood, and my heart goes out to you.. be strong. rest, in knowing that Jesus has already saved you.. go to him. he wants to talk with you! hmm.. i also like the way youve brought the whole peice together, in one 'breath'. very clever. well, cheers friend, im hoping for ya.
joshua |
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