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[sid] => 102775
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => No one knows
[time] => 2005-08-05 19:05:21
[hometext] => Things get too much sometimes. Like now.
[bodytext] => I just want someone to take my hand,
And tell me it will be okay,
But no one knows and no one cares,
And no one knows quite what to say.
I'd speak it all inside my head,
If only I could find the words,
But everything I think about,
Just seems to make this worse.
The thoughts are just confusing,
Advice just makes me cry,
I'm trying not to tell you,
But I really couldn't lie.
And I mostly want to hide it,
Though I know it would be wrong,
But if I tried pretending,
It wouldn't seem so strong,
I would push it down inside again,
Like I have so many times before,
And maybe (Only maybe)
I could live a little more.
But I know it's not an answer,
Only an escape,
I have to face reality,
And learn from this mistake,
I cannot keep on hiding,
Though I know not how to show,
The feelings that are killing me,
The feelings no one knows.
[comments] => 10
[counter] => 254
[topic] => 61
[informant] => lostinmyself
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 15
[ratings] => 3
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => selfstruggles
)
No one knows
Contributed by
lostinmyself
on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 07:05:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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I just want someone to take my hand,
And tell me it will be okay,
But no one knows and no one cares,
And no one knows quite what to say.
I'd speak it all inside my head,
If only I could find the words,
But everything I think about,
Just seems to make this worse.
The thoughts are just confusing,
Advice just makes me cry,
I'm trying not to tell you,
But I really couldn't lie.
And I mostly want to hide it,
Though I know it would be wrong,
But if I tried pretending,
It wouldn't seem so strong,
I would push it down inside again,
Like I have so many times before,
And maybe (Only maybe)
I could live a little more.
But I know it's not an answer,
Only an escape,
I have to face reality,
And learn from this mistake,
I cannot keep on hiding,
Though I know not how to show,
The feelings that are killing me,
The feelings no one knows.
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lostinmyself
... [
2005-08-05 19:05:21]
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Re: No one knows
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 07:10:02 PM AEST
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This is very sad Phil.
It almost seems like a cry for help
Hope you feel better soon... |
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Re: No one knows
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by Nazmythian on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 07:34:20 PM AEST
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Phil ... my hand will reach your way any time you need it. Then it'll poke you three or four times, tap ya on the shoulder and I'll scream tag you're it !!!!
Then I will turn and run away and smash right into a door or something. I would fall down and then I would need a hand.
I think you have really done well here Phil you are always so clear and concise when you write out what you are feeling. There are times I actually envy that of you.
Nazzy ~
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Re: No one knows
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 07:44:18 PM AEST
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Wow lol I was very surprised when I seen the name Phil, my name is Phil to, lol. I read this poem I loved it,
the words you used crawled into my heart, the ending was excellent, it topped it all off. SLipSiX. |
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Re: No one knows
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by MorningDove on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 07:52:09 PM AEST
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Splendid outpouring of feelings, Philly. Sweety, I am here if you need me. You know how to reach me.
Love,
Rita |
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Re: No one knows
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by Archie on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 09:22:12 PM AEST
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| Great poem Phil. I have a solution and it is called talking. I struggle with the same thing . What I mean is this take all the time you need to say the things you want to say and they will come out. I would rather do that than to be the shaken soda bottle whose cap is not screwed on too tight, boy does that make a mess. (: |
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Re: No one knows
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by sprinter27 on
Friday, 5th August 2005 @ 11:08:26 PM AEST
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awesome poem. i totally know how this feels. and if you ever need to talk, just PM me. this was a great write and you wrote it well. great write... i loved it! keep up the good work!
sending lots of luck for you to heal and get it out
~sprints |
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Re: No one knows
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by Fionndruinne on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 04:16:01 AM AEST
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Phil, I'm sad to see that times are as they are for you... and hope that they brighten very soon. Remember I'm always here (and sometimes even on at the same time!), and a hug (the closest I can get it to the real thing) and a prayer are only this far away. Blessings to you, my friend.
*hugs* (with italics for extra-tight)
Andrew |
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Re: No one knows
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by Kie on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 12:49:49 PM AEST
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If I could hug you, I truly would.
To think (and I often do) that there are people who feel that no one sees, understands, acknowledges--that gets to me--straight to the heart.
I'll listen and i'll hear, anytime. I do hear--this.
Kie :) |
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Re: No one knows
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by liquidsunshine on
Saturday, 6th August 2005 @ 12:54:20 PM AEST
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Although I could, it seems completely useless to critique this poem. I'd rather let you know that, although I'm miles upon oceans away, I love you and I care. You know I'm always there to talk even if I am a little flighty at times (as I know I can be).
Love and (especially, for you) peace,
Chelsea |
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Re: No one knows
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 01:39:28 PM AEST
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OK, form and rhytmn...I am so impressed!!
This has such a wonderful, natural flow to it...did I say I was impressed????!!!!
Content....I won't even comment, you already know. |
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