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Tell Me Some Lies
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 09:54:07 PM in AEST
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"Just buy me a drink
I'll tell you some lies
About ever after
and elegant sighs
Of love that's eternal
Man, what a joke
Just buy me another
and light up my smoke"
I sat by his side
and got him his drink
I lit up his smoke
He gave me a wink
And told me a story
of passion and pain
I'm thinkin' the drinkin'
had pickled his brain
Now after an hour
of tantrums and tears
a bottle of whiskey
and multiple beers
He slumped on the bar
a shell of a man
and I took a moment
to go to the can...
Now when I returned
he had second wind
and ranted some more
of how she had sinned
"She left me a pauper "
He said with a sigh
I ordered another
"This time you can buy "
As soon as those words
had slipped from my lips
A woman came to him
Her hands on her hips
And said, " Time to go dear"
With love in her eyes...
yep...
I bought him some drinks
and he told me some lies
L. Carling c2005
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Re: Tell Me Some Lies
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by holderofthestone on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 10:00:17 PM AEST
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| wow... awesome write, sad but very well written |
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Re: Tell Me Some Lies
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by vibes2go on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 10:10:58 PM AEST
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| (hand on hips) fancy meeting you here .. you might have met my son, dear! lol c'mon.. what'll ya have rose man .. A pepsi for me .. make that a diet .. and I'm working out .. some people think I'm too fluffy! ... Oh and I'm buying .. so none of that dark stuff .. LOL |
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Re: Tell Me Some Lies
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 10:24:11 PM AEST
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a good one my friend had me going
*Michelle* tosses rose petals at larry
hey get your yahoo fixed miss you tons
huggssss and then some
Michelle |
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Re: Tell Me Some Lies
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by MorningDove on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 11:49:56 PM AEST
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Isn't that what people generally get in bars; one night stands and a glass full of lies? Damn, that would be a great poem, Larry. Why don't you write it and save some poor soul a few bucks or heartbreak, lol. Seriously, this is a great write. Might wake one or two people up, ya think?
Petals for ya, Pooka,
Rita |
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Re: Tell Me Some Lies
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by emystar on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 03:20:55 AM AEST
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A very good write.
Good work.
huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Tell Me Some Lies
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 04:28:38 AM AEST
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Wow what can I say, this sounds really familiar. You really write this well. I can feel the expressions you are using. So well done again Larry on a profound write.
Jane ~ |
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Re: Tell Me Some Lies
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by pixie on
Thursday, 18th August 2005 @ 08:41:56 AM AEST
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ohhh what a brilliant and creative poem Larry, *hugs*
pix xx |
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Re: Tell Me Some Lies
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by Nazmythian on
Wednesday, 31st August 2005 @ 12:21:15 AM AEST
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Brilliant Larry, I was not expection the ending at all. At first I was thinking of "Love On The Rocks" from Neil Diamond ... but your form and style as wonderful as ever just stripped that away by the end of the first stanza.
You deserve bushels of roses for this one.
Nazmythian ~ |
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Re: Tell Me Some Lies
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 26th September 2005 @ 05:02:25 PM AEST
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Did I miss something here? I laughed my fool head off
at the last stanza. I must have taken this quite differently
than the others.
I pictured poor Larry, sitting there with some love-torn man,
crying in his beer and Larry doing his best to console him and
buy his drinks. And then bam, his wife shows up and
Larry realizes the man had been fabricating, (for whatever reason).
In any case, a great write Larry. I loved it!
~Breezy |
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Re: Tell Me Some Lies
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 20th February 2006 @ 10:08:21 PM AEST
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Your creative wit is eternal. I was gone for some months, but have returned to see you still awing us all.
Bar keep, just water for my friend tonight.
Mike |
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Re: Tell Me Some Lies
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by sweetangeluk on
Sunday, 26th February 2006 @ 11:00:19 AM AEST
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Superb Larry I remember only a little of this night ... only joking
Love Angelxx |
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