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Stab Me
Contributed by
Mesano
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Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 08:51:50 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Hurt and empty, dark and alone,
The pain is eating me alive,
Unseen rivers of bright red blood,
Bleeding to much to survive.
Desperately holding on to nothing,
Desperately needing another chance,
Anything to save the friendship we had,
But now you hardly give me a glance.
Having feelings for someone else,
Makes things more complicated,
These feelings, the confusion,
I fear I underestimated.
So tell me now how you feel,
I'm sick of trying to guess,
Or just stab me with your knife,
Because that might hurt less.
Copyright ©
Mesano
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2005-09-28 08:51:50]
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Re: Stab Me
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 09:00:44 AM AEST
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"When we used to say goodnight
I'd often kiss and hold you tight
but lately you don't seem to care
you close the door and leave me standing there
oh honey that's not fair"
Quote from "I'm moving on" by Sam Cooke
This is a very good write |
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Re: Stab Me
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by LEMMEN on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 10:14:13 AM AEST
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| Bleeding to much to survive what a statement been there done that well i can honestly say it dose get better ~Good Write~ |
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Re: Stab Me
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by loopylou on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 10:50:47 AM AEST
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| jeez dont we all feel like this at some point? it sucks, but you expressed it well :) |
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Re: Stab Me
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by hauntedscorp on
Wednesday, 28th September 2005 @ 04:57:14 PM AEST
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Nicely done with this emotive piece. The flow was fairly smooth, save one or two parts, but your emotions were well conveyed. Alot of truth in that last stanza, especially the last two lines. Hope things get better for ya: )
Scorp. |
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Re: Stab Me
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by vampyrekiss on
Thursday, 29th September 2005 @ 06:10:56 PM AEST
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| this was brillent, it flowed nice andwas full of emotions, I loved it, keep writing and I cant wait to read the rest of your stuff |
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Re: Stab Me
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by xofireangel27 on
Thursday, 29th September 2005 @ 10:03:37 PM AEST
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very good, excatly how i feel. your poems are all very good. good job. keep up the awesome work.
-Kelly- |
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Re: Stab Me
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by Dawny on
Friday, 17th March 2006 @ 05:43:55 AM AEST
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How come you havent written for so long?? This poem is excellent, great imagery and descriptive emotion. Well done
Love Dawny xxx |
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Re: Stab Me
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by sam16 on
Monday, 31st July 2006 @ 04:15:27 PM AEST
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| amazing poem...filled with emotion well done |
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