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Time Out
Contributed by
sprinter27
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Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 09:45:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Im calling a time out
There is not a doubt
Ive played for too long
Now Im not that strong
This game is killing me
Im struggling to be free
I dont know what to do
And its hard to talk to you
I just want to give up it all
And Im ready to take the fall
I know you want me to talk
And you want to take a walk
But I cant tell you how I feel
Im afraid youll steal the wheel
And drive me off in to a place
Where we can stare into space
A place where youll make me talk
A place where we can only take a walk
Because there is nothing else to do
And the only ones are me and you
Im calling a time out
I need to have a time out
Im growing weak and you strong
And Ive been fighting for too long
Im calling a time out
There is not a doubt
If I dont, youll win my mind
And youll control how I drive
I have to get away from you
Or who knows what Ill do?
You are right and I am wrong
I am weak and you are strong
You will win if I cant fight
I know that this isnt right
But I hurt and dont want to talk
And I dont want to take a walk
Ive got to fight
Even if it isnt right
Ive got to push away
Even if it hurts everyday
Im calling a time out
There is not a doubt
Ive played for to long
Now Im not that strong
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Re: Time Out
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by Misunderstood_gurl on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 11:26:28 PM AEST
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I think the game you r talking about is the game of life...am i right? if i am i liked the fact that you compared football to your life. it's a really good poem keep up the gr8 work!
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Re: Time Out
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 18th October 2005 @ 03:36:11 AM AEST
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The game of love : )
I like the repetitive lines in this, as it enhances the desperate plea in your words, and the conflicting emotions.
The flow was on point too; nice and smooth. Those last two stanzas really made the poem for me.
Great job expressing yourself in this one sprints. Keep 'em coming!
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