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Array ( [sid] => 109692 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => What Is Wrong With You? [time] => 2005-11-14 04:08:27 [hometext] => I'm not in any rhyming sort of mood, because the man is getting worse... You can comment if you want, but I'm REALLY just venting here... [bodytext] => What is wrong with you?
You're a horrible person,
The scum of the earth,
You live a horrible and
Meaningless existence.
The one thing I've even heard
Of you EVER doing right
Is to help your wife to bless this world
With your daughter,
The love of my life.
This girl, this gem,
This precious flower,
Who you claim I mistreat
Is the girl I long to make my wife
So take that!
She doesn't think I mistreat her,
So I don't see where you get off
Calling me a spoiled brat,
Telling your daughter I have
No responsibilities,
No role in my family
You say being in college
Is no challenge
Working at camp is laborless
Well, at risk of sounding slightly rude
BITE ME!
There is a difference in the workloads
Between your daughter and I, that's true,
But how is her being weighted down
A positive condition
You work your daughter half to death
And promise her time with me
Am I so wrong to be disappointed
When you turn out to be a hypocrite
I don't call her enough
Or pay her at all enough attention
She can tell you I'm bad on the phone,
And I'm not the one who puts her off
Doing who knows what
Just so I don't have to think about her.
I think about her non-stop
Whether I'm awake or not
I want to do what's right for her
Which is what put me here before
I'm not in college for me
I'm no in it for the job
I'm in college so I can support a family
With your daughter
She doesn't suffer at my hand
She wants to go to California,
To seek her dream career
I want her to go
Because she wants to go
But you can't lett her that far away, can you?
I can't believe you have the guts
To lible me to her
I'm sure that scores you brownie points
Telling her she's dating a leech
A "spoiled brat used to having everything his way"
Here's a secret for YOU... I'M NOT
I know I'm not good enough for your daughter
No one is
But the fact that I can restrain myself
From telling you off to your face
Seems to make her think I am enough for her
I make her happy
I make her laugh
I let her cry
I listen to her
Tell me something
What have YOU done for her lately?
Besides trying to break her heart, I mean
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What Is Wrong With You?

Contributed by sir_odd87 on Monday, 14th November 2005 @ 04:08:27 AM in AEST
Topic: AngryPoetry

What is wrong with you?
You're a horrible person,
The scum of the earth,
You live a horrible and
Meaningless existence.
The one thing I've even heard
Of you EVER doing right
Is to help your wife to bless this world
With your daughter,
The love of my life.
This girl, this gem,
This precious flower,
Who you claim I mistreat
Is the girl I long to make my wife
So take that!
She doesn't think I mistreat her,
So I don't see where you get off
Calling me a spoiled brat,
Telling your daughter I have
No responsibilities,
No role in my family
You say being in college
Is no challenge
Working at camp is laborless
Well, at risk of sounding slightly rude
BITE ME!
There is a difference in the workloads
Between your daughter and I, that's true,
But how is her being weighted down
A positive condition
You work your daughter half to death
And promise her time with me
Am I so wrong to be disappointed
When you turn out to be a hypocrite
I don't call her enough
Or pay her at all enough attention
She can tell you I'm bad on the phone,
And I'm not the one who puts her off
Doing who knows what
Just so I don't have to think about her.
I think about her non-stop
Whether I'm awake or not
I want to do what's right for her
Which is what put me here before
I'm not in college for me
I'm no in it for the job
I'm in college so I can support a family
With your daughter
She doesn't suffer at my hand
She wants to go to California,
To seek her dream career
I want her to go
Because she wants to go
But you can't lett her that far away, can you?
I can't believe you have the guts
To lible me to her
I'm sure that scores you brownie points
Telling her she's dating a leech
A "spoiled brat used to having everything his way"
Here's a secret for YOU... I'M NOT
I know I'm not good enough for your daughter
No one is
But the fact that I can restrain myself
From telling you off to your face
Seems to make her think I am enough for her
I make her happy
I make her laugh
I let her cry
I listen to her
Tell me something
What have YOU done for her lately?
Besides trying to break her heart, I mean

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Re: What Is Wrong With You? (User Rating: 1 )
by hauntedscorp on Tuesday, 15th November 2005 @ 02:19:22 AM AEST
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Wonderfully emotive and in-the-moment. I really like this, and that ending has sting: )
Your thoughts here are very raw, but in a most pleasant way...these aren't the type of feelings that should be poetically 'dolled up'.
Very nicely done, and all the best for you two!!

Scorp.

Re: What Is Wrong With You? (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Tuesday, 15th November 2005 @ 08:34:38 AM AEST
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u did really good here

Re: What Is Wrong With You? (User Rating: 1 )
by dark_fighter_chick on Friday, 18th November 2005 @ 06:56:16 PM AEST
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Whow, that gave me chills....... i liked it. Your girlfriend is very lucky to have you.

Re: What Is Wrong With You? (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Sunday, 1st January 2006 @ 02:43:09 AM AEST
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Well i certainly hope he reads this but then someone that narrow mindness could never understand.
I agree she is very lucky to have u. I don't know how old she is but sooner or later she'll be of age. He will only have him self to blame.
Great venting and u r very wise so just hold onto that thought.
huggs,
emy

Re: What Is Wrong With You? (User Rating: 1 )
by darkangeleyes57 on Wednesday, 5th April 2006 @ 11:26:14 AM AEST
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You certainly do love her and that much is clear.. I felt that you are willing to do anything and everything for her and i think that if her dad cannot see that then he is truly blind of everything before him.. and that he is truly not a man because he will not accept the fact that you are in love with his daughter and that means he won't have her full love and attention.. I believe that you love her more then he will ever let himself to see or believe and this poem showed that you really love her..

take care
christina

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