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[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => Losing Myself
[time] => 2005-12-03 18:47:13
[hometext] => Sounds like a poem of a tragic love loss, but think again!
[bodytext] => Standing in the rain and
feeling my inner pain.
Walking in the shadow of life,
hiding behind a mock light.
Coming through the fog you’ll see me.
Close your eyes, count to three
and there I’ll be;
the girl with the broken smile.
I’ve been standing here all the while.
I wish I could just fade away.
Today is just another day.
I’m crying inside and nobody knows it but me,
as I stand in the rain letting my tears fall free.
Salty tears disguised as rain drops,
holding my breath until my heart stops.
I feed you lies,
I don’t deserve to be alive.
I really deserve to be caught in my web of lies
My dead flesh’s fate is to be eaten by flies.
Locked up inside myself in chains of depressing thoughts,
Composing poetry on the spot where your dead body rots.
Lying in the grass next to your unmarked grave.
I know it’s yours, for I can feel the love you never gave.
Your broken soul still lingers,
I feel the touch of your cold, lifeless fingers.
Rushes of memories haunt me as I
find myself floating through a nostalgic sea.
Particles of love I had been to blind to see,
embrace my heart.
I see now how it was me that let it fall apart.
Too consumed by my own despair,
It’s senseless that love and hate could ever compare.
Yet, that’s what I felt. I only saw hate.
I fear now it may be too late.
Too late to let you know I love you too.
Even after all the fights we had gone through.
I never realized until now how much I really miss you.
Thinking of what lies inside this dark tomb, it cannot be me
you view, and assume
the lie that I reside in the same room.
You relish in your lie of comfort, but I hide
in you closet of discomfort and disquiet of mind.
I see now how unselfish you were.
You gave me love I didn’t deserve,
I didn’t see it, I was to blind.
How I wish I could gather up this mess and let it rewind.
I know I’d do things different this time.
But I’m just. . .
standing in the rain and
feeling my inner pain.
Walking in the shadow of life,
hiding behind a mock light.
Coming through the fog you’ll see me.
Close your eyes, count to three
and there I’ll be;
the girl with the broken smile.
I’ve been standing here all the while.
I wish I could just fade away
into another day
where I don't have to reminisce
of parts of me I miss
and
try to find some life inside.
~Kortnie~
[comments] => 10
[counter] => 238
[topic] => 61
[informant] => justme03
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 28
[ratings] => 6
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => selfstruggles
)
Losing Myself
Contributed by
justme03
on
Saturday, 3rd December 2005 @ 06:47:13 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Standing in the rain and
feeling my inner pain.
Walking in the shadow of life,
hiding behind a mock light.
Coming through the fog you’ll see me.
Close your eyes, count to three
and there I’ll be;
the girl with the broken smile.
I’ve been standing here all the while.
I wish I could just fade away.
Today is just another day.
I’m crying inside and nobody knows it but me,
as I stand in the rain letting my tears fall free.
Salty tears disguised as rain drops,
holding my breath until my heart stops.
I feed you lies,
I don’t deserve to be alive.
I really deserve to be caught in my web of lies
My dead flesh’s fate is to be eaten by flies.
Locked up inside myself in chains of depressing thoughts,
Composing poetry on the spot where your dead body rots.
Lying in the grass next to your unmarked grave.
I know it’s yours, for I can feel the love you never gave.
Your broken soul still lingers,
I feel the touch of your cold, lifeless fingers.
Rushes of memories haunt me as I
find myself floating through a nostalgic sea.
Particles of love I had been to blind to see,
embrace my heart.
I see now how it was me that let it fall apart.
Too consumed by my own despair,
It’s senseless that love and hate could ever compare.
Yet, that’s what I felt. I only saw hate.
I fear now it may be too late.
Too late to let you know I love you too.
Even after all the fights we had gone through.
I never realized until now how much I really miss you.
Thinking of what lies inside this dark tomb, it cannot be me
you view, and assume
the lie that I reside in the same room.
You relish in your lie of comfort, but I hide
in you closet of discomfort and disquiet of mind.
I see now how unselfish you were.
You gave me love I didn’t deserve,
I didn’t see it, I was to blind.
How I wish I could gather up this mess and let it rewind.
I know I’d do things different this time.
But I’m just. . .
standing in the rain and
feeling my inner pain.
Walking in the shadow of life,
hiding behind a mock light.
Coming through the fog you’ll see me.
Close your eyes, count to three
and there I’ll be;
the girl with the broken smile.
I’ve been standing here all the while.
I wish I could just fade away
into another day
where I don't have to reminisce
of parts of me I miss
and
try to find some life inside.
~Kortnie~
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justme03
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Re: Losing Myself
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 3rd December 2005 @ 09:35:26 PM AEST
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| WOW...... Masterpiece...... there are no words that could justify how truly powerful & awesome this poem is. I love it. I am speechless.....10!!!!! |
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Re: Losing Myself
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by andyp89057 on
Sunday, 4th December 2005 @ 01:00:48 AM AEST
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| Wow! Im shocked that you were able to keep it going that long. After i read it i had to look at it again. its very long and yet when reading it you just sucked in even after it ends. Very Very Well Done.... |
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Re: Losing Myself
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by veenu on
Sunday, 4th December 2005 @ 03:48:16 AM AEST
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| thats really nice of u .......and i am searching for those line which r great but i can't its a master piece all the way keep sharing ur lovely poems written with all the emotions god bless u |
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Re: Losing Myself
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 5th December 2005 @ 05:59:56 PM AEST
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| wonderful write from a wonder writer,,,I hope your lifre changes and changes for the better..,,,Eddy |
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Re: Losing Myself
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by outlaw_mutiny on
Monday, 5th December 2005 @ 08:03:56 PM AEST
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EVERYONE WAS RIGHT THIS POEM IS AWSOME
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Re: Losing Myself
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by trini on
Thursday, 8th December 2005 @ 07:33:25 PM AEST
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this was really well written. i enjoyed it alot. hope to reading more of this. keep up the good work
-trini |
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Re: Losing Myself
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 9th December 2005 @ 06:13:44 AM AEST
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Kortnie I can't believe I missed this write by you. An outstanding masterpiece penned remarkably well. Well worth the read. Thanks for sharing ur brilliant work with us.
*hugs*
~sue~ |
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Re: Losing Myself
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by Shmokin on
Monday, 12th December 2005 @ 02:25:42 PM AEST
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| Really enjoyed this one, should be made into a song :-) |
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Re: Losing Myself
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by Kamal on
Friday, 6th January 2006 @ 10:09:33 AM AEST
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Wow I think that your great with expressing your emotions through write...
I appreciate the message because I am going through the same situation.. see I'm a man that don't think theres appreciation from woman I cook clean faithful but now I feel that this person pushes me to the limit until I 'm ready to leave then thats when she starts to please and be at my need... but even then I still fill deceit so I really appreciat your poem because its my life I see that makes your write unique....
PEace & love |
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Re: Losing Myself
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by Spazzo on
Monday, 10th April 2006 @ 09:52:04 AM AEST
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This is deep, I can relate to this. A great poem.
Take care.
Scott |
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