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[title] => Deception
[time] => 2005-12-18 14:20:40
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[bodytext] => She was only make believe
An apparition to deceive
A wisp of smoke in dark of night
A ghost that keeps just out of sight
Another voice when all alone
That speeds the heart then chills the bone
A sound you heard beyond the door
Only these and nothing more
Damn the Gods for misconceptions
Wishful thoughts and misperceptions...
Foolish wastes of precious years
Sleepless nights and countless tears
Woe, this man with lover's dreams
Future plans and hopeful schemes
Bitter waking to reveal
She was never even real
L. Carling c2005
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Deception
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
on
Sunday, 18th December 2005 @ 02:20:40 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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She was only make believe
An apparition to deceive
A wisp of smoke in dark of night
A ghost that keeps just out of sight
Another voice when all alone
That speeds the heart then chills the bone
A sound you heard beyond the door
Only these and nothing more
Damn the Gods for misconceptions
Wishful thoughts and misperceptions...
Foolish wastes of precious years
Sleepless nights and countless tears
Woe, this man with lover's dreams
Future plans and hopeful schemes
Bitter waking to reveal
She was never even real
L. Carling c2005
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Rakerman1999
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2005-12-18 14:20:40]
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Re: Deception
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by bobotheclown on
Sunday, 18th December 2005 @ 06:25:45 PM AEST
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Interesting poem my friend this is good, but I
have read a lot better by you of course that
probably has to do with my whole not getting
the poem lol. It is good though don't get me
wrong and I liked the rhyming it was nice.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Deception
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th December 2005 @ 07:24:25 PM AEST
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| A very good poem, very beautiful. Loved what was expressed throught out it. SLipSiX. |
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Re: Deception
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by glassicallyunsuperficial on
Sunday, 18th December 2005 @ 11:44:20 PM AEST
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Loved the metaphors..
cheers,
-glass |
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Re: Deception
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 19th December 2005 @ 12:49:19 PM AEST
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Bitterness and sadness, this work wears them like a glove. I hope things get better my friend!!!
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Re: Deception
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 25th December 2005 @ 08:28:38 PM AEST
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Wow, Larry! Incredible! Such a bittersweet write, for although the
essence itself is quite bereaved, it was, (as always magnificently so),
penned flawlessly.
"Damn the Gods for misconceptions
Wishful thoughts and misperceptions..."
Loved those two lines. You capture this emotion so very well.
I'm sorry you find yourself in such an unhappy place right now ...
would that I could take it all away, my friend. Your writes continue
to put a sorrowful grip on my already weakened heart.
Well done, this one Larry.
~Breezy |
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Re: Deception
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by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 2nd January 2006 @ 01:05:33 AM AEST
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Boy, this one's got quite a kick to it! These four lines:
Damn the Gods for misconceptions
Wishful thoughts and misperceptions...
Foolish wastes of precious years
Sleepless nights and countless tears
... have such a fabulous pace and rhythm to them. I must of said them aloud a half dozen times.
I'm not quite sure how you managed it, Larry... but you somehow threaded the line between anger, melancholy and strength. It's really quite impressive!
~Snemmy
(who thinks she mixed up a couple metaphors there! lol)
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Re: Deception
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by Spike on
Wednesday, 11th January 2006 @ 06:49:56 AM AEST
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Echoes of Poe in this urgent metre, I'm sure.
Fantasy sure is a powerful distraction from the empty real. A little pocket rocket of a write, Larry.
Spike |
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Re: Deception
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by SkC_cutie on
Thursday, 23rd February 2006 @ 12:21:14 PM AEST
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| OmG I really like this one u.Larry! i think it is one of your top. I like the wording and the idea. You are always coming up with such good writes. *kisses |
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