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Array ( [sid] => 113618 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => True Review [time] => 2006-01-22 22:44:03 [hometext] => comment please. it's message seems unlear [bodytext] => It started hard
And just got worse
Your body's tired and sore

Your mind is taxed
Your eyes; blood shot
Beat down right to core

Hits home
Then worse, your family too
All doors are slamming shut

There's no way out
Your trapped inside
A deep n' rigid rut

Alone. It's you.
You're left a choice
This choice could be your last:

To quit; give up
Or still to try
Not quit but know you've lost?

Now stop. Re-think
Of what you've done
To get right where you are

You've been through hell
Been broke and beat
And felt the future scar

Your body; healed
Your mind; refreshed
Yourself; re-born anew

For what you think
And Know is true
Will be your true review [comments] => 4 [counter] => 482 [topic] => 32 [informant] => lifefliesby [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => SadPoetry )

True Review

Contributed by lifefliesby on Sunday, 22nd January 2006 @ 10:44:03 PM in AEST
Topic: SadPoetry

It started hard
And just got worse
Your body's tired and sore

Your mind is taxed
Your eyes; blood shot
Beat down right to core

Hits home
Then worse, your family too
All doors are slamming shut

There's no way out
Your trapped inside
A deep n' rigid rut

Alone. It's you.
You're left a choice
This choice could be your last:

To quit; give up
Or still to try
Not quit but know you've lost?

Now stop. Re-think
Of what you've done
To get right where you are

You've been through hell
Been broke and beat
And felt the future scar

Your body; healed
Your mind; refreshed
Yourself; re-born anew

For what you think
And Know is true
Will be your true review

Copyright © lifefliesby ... [ 2006-01-22 22:44:03]
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Re: True Review (User Rating: 1 )
by dc on Sunday, 22nd January 2006 @ 11:26:26 PM AEST
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Your write is wonderful- and basically what is - says - you're the only one that can judge what you do - and you're the only one that can reap the benefits or pay the price - that you already know. -and it can't kill you more than once- keep writting!

Re: True Review (User Rating: 1 )
by JordonsBaby17 on Monday, 23rd January 2006 @ 07:52:59 AM AEST
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i totally agree with dc! nice job!

Paula.

Re: True Review (User Rating: 1 )
by liquidsunshine on Monday, 23rd January 2006 @ 07:57:53 AM AEST
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If what that other person says is true about this poem, "it can't kill you twice."
You're so pessimistic these days, sweetie, and you don't have to be. You're stronger than that and you and I both know it. You've always been strong enough to deal with anything. I'm the one that's paranoid and frantic and stressed to no end... you're the rock, the calm, the oasis... I know it's tough sometimes, but I Know you and I Know you'll pull through this. You've never failed anyone yet and I don't believe you're going to.

I hate to see you so down. I wish I knew anything that would help you, but I haven't been able to find that for... 7 or 8 months now (and yes, that is a couple months BEFORE "it happened").
Find something or someone that makes you happy, please. For your own good.

I love you.

~Chelsea

Re: True Review (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 23rd January 2006 @ 12:13:08 PM AEST
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Good write.

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