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[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => My Mistake
[time] => 2006-02-13 02:35:05
[hometext] => A soul reconsiders their love for someone they've previously forsaken.
[bodytext] => Long ago I thought what I did was right
That my choice was for you
For your intent, to express my kindness
But now I realise what I have done
Was nothing but hurt
I destroyed your soul
I devoured your essence of life
Yet my guilt is immeasurable to your grief
The pain you must have suffered
I never meant to let you go
And yet now, I want you back
More than the very air that I breathe
But you can never forgive me
The harshness and devilry of my deed
To forsake the love I gave you
And discard it like a used tissue
Times have changed, and you and I both know
That to return to that eternal bliss,
Is for now impossible
Take a look into my mind
The yearning I now hold for your beauty
That beauty which I did once bear in my own arms
I never should have let you go
But now, our worlds have grown apart
Like realms which are never meant to pass
Never meant to see each other’s light
Pinned at opposite sides of the earth
I see light, when you see only darkness
My world seeks your comfort
Yet yours is unforgiving,
And rightly so
For who could forgive a man
Claimed to show his eternal love – enduring,
And then forget it
Like forgetting to breathe
Only one with malicious intent,
Could have done to you,
As I did
Forgive me now, my precious Angel,
My mistake, I pray you dispel
[comments] => 12
[counter] => 341
[topic] => 75
[informant] => frankcube
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 25
[ratings] => 5
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => anguished
)
My Mistake
Contributed by
frankcube
on
Monday, 13th February 2006 @ 02:35:05 AM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Long ago I thought what I did was right
That my choice was for you
For your intent, to express my kindness
But now I realise what I have done
Was nothing but hurt
I destroyed your soul
I devoured your essence of life
Yet my guilt is immeasurable to your grief
The pain you must have suffered
I never meant to let you go
And yet now, I want you back
More than the very air that I breathe
But you can never forgive me
The harshness and devilry of my deed
To forsake the love I gave you
And discard it like a used tissue
Times have changed, and you and I both know
That to return to that eternal bliss,
Is for now impossible
Take a look into my mind
The yearning I now hold for your beauty
That beauty which I did once bear in my own arms
I never should have let you go
But now, our worlds have grown apart
Like realms which are never meant to pass
Never meant to see each other’s light
Pinned at opposite sides of the earth
I see light, when you see only darkness
My world seeks your comfort
Yet yours is unforgiving,
And rightly so
For who could forgive a man
Claimed to show his eternal love – enduring,
And then forget it
Like forgetting to breathe
Only one with malicious intent,
Could have done to you,
As I did
Forgive me now, my precious Angel,
My mistake, I pray you dispel
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frankcube
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Re: My Mistake
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by Dizza_13 on
Monday, 13th February 2006 @ 03:07:37 AM AEST
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a sad thing. sometimes we can never take
things back no matter how much we want to.
I hope your are forgiven
diz |
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Re: My Mistake
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by Benny14 on
Monday, 13th February 2006 @ 03:13:23 AM AEST
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| good luck man, you certainly regret things, you deserve forgiveness bud |
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Re: My Mistake
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by emystar on
Monday, 13th February 2006 @ 04:05:04 AM AEST
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Every body makes mistakes.
With such a deep, soul toching, moving write, what's not to forgive?
u remind me of my bestess male friend on this planet.
Maybe that's 'cause his name is Frank to.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: My Mistake
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 13th February 2006 @ 05:46:08 AM AEST
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touching and honest write. good luck
NO |
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Re: My Mistake
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by Eterno_Vittima on
Monday, 13th February 2006 @ 11:37:21 AM AEST
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| this is very sad, i hope you can move on or get what you wish for ... good luck |
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Re: My Mistake
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 13th February 2006 @ 01:38:12 PM AEST
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Such beautiful yet tragic a composition here.
i wish u the best a most sincere and lovely write. Don't be 2 hard on your self you took the first step, but there must be realization at both ends or it wasn't real 2 begin with. good luck, Nice writting.
Ben |
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Re: My Mistake
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 15th February 2006 @ 03:22:29 AM AEST
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| Well, I guess the only going back is to forgive yourself and live up to what is. We make choices in life, sometimes at that time it seems right, and then, somewhere in our life, we take a turn, wishing we had what we lost to come back. Well, what can I say, its lost I guess, so what we do is to go on... live what we know, as we have grown, our past mistake can only tell us that we must not return to more of what we has pained for in the past.. just to move on, and hope and pray, we have learned and ... just go forth.. all we can do.. even if , yes we still hurt, kick our selves.. we still have to keep going forward.. and try hard never to hurt others again. much peace to you.. and a hug, always enjoy your writes.. for you really put it out there.. its reality what you write.. thank you.. raquelLeah |
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Re: My Mistake
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 15th February 2006 @ 01:55:30 PM AEST
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I never meant to let you go
And yet now,I want you back
A tragedy.They say you don't know just what you have until you lose it.Your poem eloquently emphasizes this,
Den |
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Re: My Mistake
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by ShadowFox on
Monday, 20th February 2006 @ 08:23:31 PM AEST
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| I agree. Somethings we can never take back and most of the time we will regret it for the rest of our lives. But we learn from the things we have done. Great Poem!!! |
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Re: My Mistake
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by Crim on
Monday, 20th February 2006 @ 09:20:24 PM AEST
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Honestly, your poem isnt just great but it is something i wish more people would admit to. People usually take things for granted and are stubborn to admit. But being able to wake up from that is something i find amazing. Personally there is someone in my life and i wish that she would wake up and think the way you were thinking in the poem.
Great poem. |
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Re: My Mistake
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by juliette on
Monday, 27th February 2006 @ 01:15:13 AM AEST
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(I would take you back.......*wipes away tears*)
The hardest thing to do is admit that you were wrong, and sometimes you are forgiven and sometimes not, but the important thing, is that you forgive yourself - be grateful for what you had and if you ever have it again, dare not take a second for granted.......
Beautiful write - Thanks for sharing!
juliette
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Re: My Mistake
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by Packatack on
Saturday, 29th April 2006 @ 05:41:19 AM AEST
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Wow this one is good...reminds of my junior school years...thanks for sharing
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