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Are you there, can you listen to my prayer,
Help me now, in my time of need,
Bring him back to me, this i plead,

Cant you make everything, go back to the way it was,
So i can continue to be happy, for then you did deserve applause,
I miss him, I need him why'd you take him from me,
Did i do somthing wrong, something to make you angry,

Do i really deserve this punishmeant,
Cause your not only punishing me,
Think of everyone else your hurting,
His mum, his dad, his whole family,

When he smiled it lighted up my life,
And now that light is gone,
How can i keep on living,
When i know god, yes god was wrong,

Why on earth are you being so cruel,
He was my one true love,
I cant stand being here without him,
Dont you think ive suffered enough,

So sorry god for what im about to do,
Because it truly is a sin,
And even if im plunged into the fiery depths of hell,
I'd rather be there, then here without him,
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this cruel world and beyond

Contributed by -why_not_let_me_live- on Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 09:35:49 AM in AEST
Topic: spiritual

Hello God,
Are you there, can you listen to my prayer,
Help me now, in my time of need,
Bring him back to me, this i plead,

Cant you make everything, go back to the way it was,
So i can continue to be happy, for then you did deserve applause,
I miss him, I need him why'd you take him from me,
Did i do somthing wrong, something to make you angry,

Do i really deserve this punishmeant,
Cause your not only punishing me,
Think of everyone else your hurting,
His mum, his dad, his whole family,

When he smiled it lighted up my life,
And now that light is gone,
How can i keep on living,
When i know god, yes god was wrong,

Why on earth are you being so cruel,
He was my one true love,
I cant stand being here without him,
Dont you think ive suffered enough,

So sorry god for what im about to do,
Because it truly is a sin,
And even if im plunged into the fiery depths of hell,
I'd rather be there, then here without him,

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Re: this cruel world and beyond (User Rating: 1 )
by Jackee_line on Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 09:39:32 AM AEST
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well written poem, full of emotions, I can feel the pain.

Re: this cruel world and beyond (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 09:55:09 AM AEST
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Such deep pain in this one. But, if you look to god, he will give you your answers. Probably not what you want to hear, but it is true....Mike

Re: this cruel world and beyond (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 10:21:26 AM AEST
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A very sad write. Good job, overall. In content I must say that it is never God who hurts us. Our humanity, the seperate factor of our Lord is what hurts us. God does not take anything from anyone, all is his. The knowledge that God took back something that is his, should comfort you.

At the same time I would be totally unhuman to not sympathize with what you are feeling. God understands your emotions, and if you look to him, as you did in this poem an ocean of comfort will eventually flood your world.

Terrific job!

Thoughts and prayers with you

- SCM

Re: this cruel world and beyond (User Rating: 1 )
by Butterflygirl40 on Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 10:54:38 AM AEST
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Well written poem. and so much suffering here but i dont blame God for anything that happens to me in my life. I take my life and try to live the best i can. and when i make mistakes in my life that is my own fault and not God's fault . And when someone's dies i dont look at it like why did god do that to me.

This is just my point of view
but I love God and i dont blame him for anything .. you should look to god and you will get your answers you are looking for .

try praying it always helps me .

Re: this cruel world and beyond (User Rating: 1 )
by crazy on Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 12:16:50 PM AEST
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i asked him the same things when i was 11
now i dont even believe in any thing
it hard yes i know
but if you et all the hurt take over then you start to forget all the good time you had with that special person.time will heal you i know from my own past .yes im only 15 but i know what it means to have a very special person you loved with all your heart to be taken from you.it will get worse befor it gets better,but then it will become so much easer.
so keep your head up .
much love
nice write

Re: this cruel world and beyond (User Rating: 1 )
by hearts4pain on Saturday, 25th February 2006 @ 07:43:24 PM AEST
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it may be wrong of me to ask this.

but how did he die?

im sorry he did.
you and his friends and family are in my prayers

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