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[aid] => mick
[title] => TITLE GOES HERE
[time] => 2006-03-26 01:31:44
[hometext] => Just please tell me what line stands out the most or what line means the most to you and why. Please, I'd really like to know! ^ ^ [And I left some parts out. Ask me if you'd like to know more!! PLEASE of you have any questions about it, let me know!!!!]
[bodytext] => there's nothing i could do that'd make this work
there's nothing i could do to make me first.
Joy in her eyes,
laugh in her heart
Yeah she has double of me.
She stands over what I got.
There's a little hope, sometimes
Then it goes back down
I smile over her own
when she comes around.
Just thinking about it makes me laugh.
I love how for me you feel half.
Yeah, makes me smile. Yeah I know.
These words are the things I scream, although
to you this is so unclear.
So let me speak it this time so I know you'll hear.
You've gotta listen. To me, you glisten.
And I mean that with the most regret.
Cuz if I yell them out I know they're what you still don't get.
These words are what you still don't get.
To you the only thing I can do
is be the one to be viewed through.
Yeah, you can't see
you're always burning inside me.
Always burning with me.
And when I think of your eyes
I think of my tries
I'd try those lies, but
that'd end in real goodbyes.
I can't fake what I feel
But I can feel what's fake.
Maybe if you listen
that's one less mistake you'd make.
I'm thinking about how I'd fall anywhere for you.
Thinking about how your eyes are a world with a view.
Thinking of how you'd never believe
all these words you never perceive.
You fill me with relief, then
build my head with grief.
I can never overcome what you don't know.
Your smile makes the world glow.
In turn, it just makes me think
why it's you that's got me faded to pink.
In time, it just makes me know
that it's too much to ask and
too much to hope for.
And I know it can't be done
and I know it's just a wish
but it's a lie I've won
and it's what I'd cherish.
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[topic] => 31
[informant] => sally-heart-jack
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[ratings] => 1
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TITLE GOES HERE
Contributed by
sally-heart-jack
on
Sunday, 26th March 2006 @ 01:31:44 AM in AEST
Topic:
StoryPoetry
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there's nothing i could do that'd make this work
there's nothing i could do to make me first.
Joy in her eyes,
laugh in her heart
Yeah she has double of me.
She stands over what I got.
There's a little hope, sometimes
Then it goes back down
I smile over her own
when she comes around.
Just thinking about it makes me laugh.
I love how for me you feel half.
Yeah, makes me smile. Yeah I know.
These words are the things I scream, although
to you this is so unclear.
So let me speak it this time so I know you'll hear.
You've gotta listen. To me, you glisten.
And I mean that with the most regret.
Cuz if I yell them out I know they're what you still don't get.
These words are what you still don't get.
To you the only thing I can do
is be the one to be viewed through.
Yeah, you can't see
you're always burning inside me.
Always burning with me.
And when I think of your eyes
I think of my tries
I'd try those lies, but
that'd end in real goodbyes.
I can't fake what I feel
But I can feel what's fake.
Maybe if you listen
that's one less mistake you'd make.
I'm thinking about how I'd fall anywhere for you.
Thinking about how your eyes are a world with a view.
Thinking of how you'd never believe
all these words you never perceive.
You fill me with relief, then
build my head with grief.
I can never overcome what you don't know.
Your smile makes the world glow.
In turn, it just makes me think
why it's you that's got me faded to pink.
In time, it just makes me know
that it's too much to ask and
too much to hope for.
And I know it can't be done
and I know it's just a wish
but it's a lie I've won
and it's what I'd cherish.
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Re: TITLE GOES HERE
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by chanceof_promise on
Sunday, 26th March 2006 @ 03:07:53 AM AEST
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i like this a lot a lot a lot
my fav. lines are
"These words are the things I scream, although
to you this is so unclear.
So let me speak it this time so I know you'll hear
You've gotta listen. To me, you glisten.
And I mean that with the most regret.
Cuz if I yell them out I know they're what you still don't get.
These words are what you still don't get."
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Re: TITLE GOES HERE
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by sally-heart-jack on
Friday, 20th October 2006 @ 02:36:48 PM AEST
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NOTE: I just want to add, I saw the guy that I wrote this about again a few weeks ago and he now has a girlfriend. Everyone who left for college this past year came back for homecoming, [[ last year, when I wrote this, he was a senior and I was a freshman. ]] He was having a conversation with my friend, who I was standing right next to, doesn't even ask me how I've been after he's graduated. Or "hey." [[ But then again, I was too shy to say anything to him first too. ]] 1st time seeing him in months.
Also I want to add that he never knew about this or anything. I never told him. Nothing happened. |
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Re: TITLE GOES HERE
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 29th October 2006 @ 09:28:16 PM AEST
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shot through the heart with this one
wow
its amazing how guys can be soo stupid...
you may think you have half of what she has...or maybe that was supposed to be his words...but you obviously have 3 times whatever she's got
"Just thinking about it makes me laugh.
I love how for me you feel half.
Yeah, makes me smile. Yeah I know.
These words are the things I scream, although
to you this is so unclear.
So let me speak it this time so I know you'll hear.
You've gotta listen. To me, you glisten.
And I mean that with the most regret.
Cuz if I yell them out I know they're what you still don't get.
These words are what you still don't get.
To you the only thing I can do
is be the one to be viewed through.
Yeah, you can't see
you're always burning inside me.
Always burning with me.
And when I think of your eyes
I think of my tries
I'd try those lies, but
that'd end in real goodbyes.
I can't fake what I feel
But I can feel what's fake.
Maybe if you listen
that's one less mistake you'd make"
those are the lines that stand out most to me...those lines define the way if feel for one boy...*sighs* wish he felt it back...maybe if he knew.....not just what he assumes....but if he knew the entire thing maybe he'd understand..........btu he's a guy....and guys are stupid.....especially teenagers.....all they care for is looks....and i know i dont have the body he wants...btu if he'd give me a chance...just once....dont these guys make you want to scream??? "Just thinking about it makes me laugh.
I love how for me you feel half." especially when for him i care more....
we must be having similar boy problems....amazing how i'm not the only one!
i love how your poem shows your devotion to him though he doesnt feel the same and how even though you know there is always a certain hope there that just wont go away...i know that feeling
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