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[aid] => mick
[title] => I Used To Be A Poet
[time] => 2006-04-20 22:07:28
[hometext] => This didn't come out quite how I wished it, as almost all of my poem got accidentally deleted, so this is the re-write. I debated a long time whether to post this or not.
[bodytext] => I used to be a poet
Breathing words into my blood,
Drowning in the flood,
Of emotions breaking free.
Fear tried to staunch the flow,
Hiding me from every blow,
The feeling I recalled was broken free.
I was washed away in muses tide,
I rode each wave, I flew so high,
Till the storm had won and driftwood blocked my way.
I fought a war with every breath,
Till all that waited was my death,
I was thrown again against unyielding tide.
But breathing, loud, above the din,
I clawed my way out, from within,
And found that somehow I was still alive.
Then standing weak, upon the shore,
I wait for the storm to hit once more.
Then hurl myself direct into the wind.
I'll break myself upon the lines,
Till each word is right within my mind,
And bloody and bruised, I'll start to write again
[I used to be a poet...]
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[ratings] => 5
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I Used To Be A Poet
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 10:07:28 PM in AEST
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I used to be a poet
Breathing words into my blood,
Drowning in the flood,
Of emotions breaking free.
Fear tried to staunch the flow,
Hiding me from every blow,
The feeling I recalled was broken free.
I was washed away in muses tide,
I rode each wave, I flew so high,
Till the storm had won and driftwood blocked my way.
I fought a war with every breath,
Till all that waited was my death,
I was thrown again against unyielding tide.
But breathing, loud, above the din,
I clawed my way out, from within,
And found that somehow I was still alive.
Then standing weak, upon the shore,
I wait for the storm to hit once more.
Then hurl myself direct into the wind.
I'll break myself upon the lines,
Till each word is right within my mind,
And bloody and bruised, I'll start to write again
[I used to be a poet...]
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Re: I Used To Be A Poet
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 10:13:52 PM AEST
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I am glad you did, Lost... It's good. Seems to me that you have all the wods right.
(Sorry about your poems)
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Re: I Used To Be A Poet
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 10:17:28 PM AEST
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yup.....Beautiful
I, too am glad you posted it!!! |
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Re: I Used To Be A Poet
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by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 10:17:55 PM AEST
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I like this a lot. The rhythm and format is rather different, and flows very nicely. And it's an excellent metaphor, very powerful. I think I can sense in the wording, though I couldn't point out where exactly, the (none too shabby) attempt to retrieve a lost poem, mostly because I've done the same, I think.
Well done, my friend. I like this.
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Re: I Used To Be A Poet
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by shelby on
Thursday, 20th April 2006 @ 11:04:58 PM AEST
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you are still very much a poet, this was poweful.
Michelle |
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Re: I Used To Be A Poet
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 21st April 2006 @ 12:05:36 PM AEST
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I agree with what everyone else saids .
you are an excellent poet and don't let anyone say otherwise.
love and hugs |
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Re: I Used To Be A Poet
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by deadheadpoet on
Friday, 21st April 2006 @ 05:30:55 PM AEST
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| You know what Phil....We were always poets and always will be poets....I don't find we have much say so in it....you know. My writing comes out at certain times...like someone allows me to write.....allows me....to let it all flow....and at times I feel I have no control over it whatsoever. Peace, Laura (who loves how you write) |
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Re: I Used To Be A Poet
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 23rd April 2006 @ 01:41:34 AM AEST
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OMG! Phil, this poem is so powerful. Your use of brilliant metaphors, visionary imagery, and beautiful flow makes you then, now, and forever more not merely a poet but a wonderful captivating poet.
You have a gift and you are a gift to us. Thank you for sharing.
Love ya' Phil.
Sincerely,
Tim
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Re: I Used To Be A Poet
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by wizard on
Sunday, 23rd April 2006 @ 08:43:50 AM AEST
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the irony of the title if great. i'm a fan of the A,A,B rhyming style, and you've done quite well with it.
nice write.
wiz |
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Re: I Used To Be A Poet
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 7th May 2006 @ 06:19:32 PM AEST
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Hun~
Unbelievable depth in here. I am stumped into speechlessness.
Truly.
I know not what to say, save that you have incredible insight and
a flawless gift for conveying that. I gather a wealth of emotion from
this particular write, hun. It is unlike any other I've read. I love how
you tied the title into the first and last line . . and the words therein
. . . just wow! You are a poet, sweets. In every sense of the word.
You knock 'em dead. Ever and always!!
~Breezy
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Re: I Used To Be A Poet
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by Man_On_High on
Tuesday, 16th May 2006 @ 11:44:53 AM AEST
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I find it to be an ode to bravery and to all who possess it-
it's a beautiful and very nobel write..
B |
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Re: I Used To Be A Poet
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 16th May 2006 @ 03:44:45 PM AEST
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| atta girl, poems are in our blood.. whether anyone else likes your poem or not... you wrote it.. you get that idea and its yours forever... and ever.... your result.. you created... I am still wondering why there is such a thing as the greatest poet on the earth, when everyone who writes a poem is great... for no one can write exactly the same way even if its the same topic.. subject.. theme.. idea etc... you are a fine poetess.. lovely work.. RL (I don't think I would be any more arrogant than the next poet .. if I said I love all of my poems and all of my poems are masterpieces.. and you should feel and think that way for your poetry too.. ) we all should be proud of our works.. and if we are unhappy later after sharing, we can always use our poem as a model and make it a new one..) you are still a poet.. even if you never write a nother word on paper, in your mind and heart you are a poet... written or thought inside of you.... RL |
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Re: I Used To Be A Poet
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by Wachumiri on
Thursday, 25th May 2006 @ 12:23:16 PM AEST
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Beautiful, I love it... With all my heart I wish I'd written it...
Take care.
David |
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Re: I Used To Be A Poet
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 17th June 2006 @ 01:32:40 PM AEST
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right off the bat i love the tittle anything with use to in it compels me and moves me with a lost sadness this is beautiful. " Then standing weak, upon the shore, how vivid how vunerable, i love that line, another treasure phill that's uniquely you. lovely work u do time after time.
((((((Phill))))))
Ben |
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