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Teens' Suicide
Contributed by
ShadowFox
on
Thursday, 18th May 2006 @ 11:51:36 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Dancing, dancing in the rain
Dancing, crying I feel the pain
Crenching rose thorns in my hand,
Dripping, bleeding on the land.
Falling hard, aching knees
Crushing heart, let me be.
Blowing winds, pass me by
Leave me be, so I can die.
As I bring the knife to my wrist,
I remember what you said....
I remember you were *****.
You said I was nothing, you said get away
I backed up slowly, not knowing what to say.
You said you loved HER, but how can that be,
when the previous night, you said you loved ME.
You walked away and left me there,
I started to cry, people began to stare.
I ran out the door and ran straight home,
That very same night, you called on the phone.
You told me off and began to yell,
Than out of your mouth, you said "go to hell!"
I dropped the phone and fell on the floor,
Than you screamed "Goodbye you whore!"
I opened my eyes and slide the knife,
And in the darkness I took my own life.
Are you happy now, can you see?
What your actions did to me?
I hope these memories haunt your head,
Because now they are gone, and I lie here dead.
Copyright ©
ShadowFox
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2006-05-18 23:51:36]
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Re: Teens' Suicide
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by sadaddy on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 12:28:50 AM AEST
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This is a sad write. It also saddens me that you young girls fall so over hills for these guys at such a young age. Don’t you realize that you must first have a long lasting friendship before you can become long lasting lovers. Besides, there are more fish in the sea. Be good and take care.
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Re: Teens' Suicide
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by emystar on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 01:00:24 AM AEST
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I pray this is just a really convincing write.
Hope I'm wrong. either way u comveinced me.
No one is worth u loosing your life willingly over.
I know it's hard but this too soon shall pass.
huggs, prayer,
emy |
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Re: Teens' Suicide
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 02:28:06 AM AEST
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wow deep so deep and sad.
Brings tears to my eyes how young people are now days.If you ever need to talk to someone Pm me ok.
anyways good write
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Re: Teens' Suicide
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by k2kdesigner on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 01:55:02 PM AEST
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Wow very powerful poem--the title alone got my attention b/c it's such a powerful subject. Don't worry there are plenty of guys out there you will find one that will make you much happier..If you need to talk I will be here.
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Re: Teens' Suicide
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by Lilbabe on
Saturday, 20th May 2006 @ 10:46:07 AM AEST
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a very sad, powerful poem...and extremely true emotions felt among teens today. i really enjoyed this poem.
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Re: Teens' Suicide
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by BrokenXbyManyX on
Sunday, 21st May 2006 @ 04:23:52 PM AEST
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I liked this poem. The structure was great. Touched me. Is this a true story?
Keep up the good work,
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