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Array ( [sid] => 122004 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => UnDone [time] => 2006-06-19 18:38:55 [hometext] => This is for everyone whose had their heart stolen and stomped on. For those nights when your alone and feel stuck in your head. [bodytext] => Breathe deep
I'm coming undone
with you there's no relief
without you there's no one.
You flew into me
you stayed close for so long
I turned away for a moment
and when I looked,
you were gone.
These memories bleed.
Inside my head,
I scream.
Within these four walls,
I dream
while the night slips into dawn.
You should be here,
I believe.
I cut the flesh until there's nothing,
I'm relieved.
I write down these words in my head,
until there's none.
The time crashes into my sleepy eyes
the cold air rushes through my window,
and reminds me I'm alive.
I take a breath and swallow all the tears,
until they die.
All the years
until they die
All my fears
until they die,
I'll swallow myself until there's none.
I breathe deep,
I'm coming undone.
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UnDone

Contributed by MachineGunBarbie on Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 06:38:55 PM in AEST
Topic: AmericanTragedy

Breathe deep
I'm coming undone
with you there's no relief
without you there's no one.
You flew into me
you stayed close for so long
I turned away for a moment
and when I looked,
you were gone.
These memories bleed.
Inside my head,
I scream.
Within these four walls,
I dream
while the night slips into dawn.
You should be here,
I believe.
I cut the flesh until there's nothing,
I'm relieved.
I write down these words in my head,
until there's none.
The time crashes into my sleepy eyes
the cold air rushes through my window,
and reminds me I'm alive.
I take a breath and swallow all the tears,
until they die.
All the years
until they die
All my fears
until they die,
I'll swallow myself until there's none.
I breathe deep,
I'm coming undone.

Copyright © MachineGunBarbie ... [ 2006-06-19 18:38:55]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: UnDone (User Rating: 1 )
by Vampirequeen on Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 07:00:40 PM AEST
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I am sorry to hear about your pain.
Its really the reality of life i guess.
You worded this poem really well.
good job

Re: UnDone (User Rating: 1 )
by wizard on Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 08:43:52 PM AEST
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what an awesome write...really, i loved it completely..i can relate to this 100 percent, as most of my writes are about the same topic..

excellent post!

wiz

Re: UnDone (User Rating: 1 )
by ever1der on Monday, 19th June 2006 @ 09:21:33 PM AEST
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someone I loved a lot once told me to "breathe"...or he would say, "take a breath baby gurl"...I would stop, breathe really deep..exxhale slowly... it helped. nice poem..it was a reminder..

Re: UnDone (User Rating: 1 )
by a7x36 on Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 12:28:43 AM AEST
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favorite line >>>> "i'll swallow myself until there's none"

Re: UnDone (User Rating: 1 )
by Davinah on Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 05:38:47 AM AEST
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Very touching.... I suppose a lot of people can relate to this. I sure can...

Absolutely wonderful write!

~Davinah~

Re: UnDone (User Rating: 1 )
by myselfindreams on Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 12:43:10 PM AEST
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very sad poem here, found myself into it deep

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