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[title] => The Beast Within
[time] => 2007-02-10 22:50:57
[hometext] => Its voice is seductive, persuasive, and insistent ... but my will might just be stronger this time
[bodytext] =>
The Beast Within
( Oh and I )
I
am
the
rare
oddity
that pet you’ll never wish away
yet hide inside and keep at bay.
Call on me
please let me out
pull me from this darkness
let my venom match your shout
Free me from this prison
let my vengeance match your need
take from me the strength to make
what troubles you now bleed
I hear your footsteps falter
in the dark outside my door
and I know all the reasons that
you’ve ever come before.
My growling and my prowling
here on this side of this wall,
are mated to your pacing
as you linger in the hall.
You’re trying to weigh odds and ends
and means and chance as fact
though once you’ve found your way to me
these things become abstract.
I am here at your disposal
as always, ever have I been
I am judge and executioner
I am The Beast Within
( Yes and I )
I
am
far
more
connected
to what you feel yet refuse to show
than you could ever hope to know.
~ Nazmythian ~
January 29, 2007
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[ratings] => 6
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => AngryPoetry
)
The Beast Within
Contributed by
Nazmythian
on
Saturday, 10th February 2007 @ 10:50:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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The Beast Within
( Oh and I )
I
am
the
rare
oddity
that pet you’ll never wish away
yet hide inside and keep at bay.
Call on me
please let me out
pull me from this darkness
let my venom match your shout
Free me from this prison
let my vengeance match your need
take from me the strength to make
what troubles you now bleed
I hear your footsteps falter
in the dark outside my door
and I know all the reasons that
you’ve ever come before.
My growling and my prowling
here on this side of this wall,
are mated to your pacing
as you linger in the hall.
You’re trying to weigh odds and ends
and means and chance as fact
though once you’ve found your way to me
these things become abstract.
I am here at your disposal
as always, ever have I been
I am judge and executioner
I am The Beast Within
( Yes and I )
I
am
far
more
connected
to what you feel yet refuse to show
than you could ever hope to know.
~ Nazmythian ~
January 29, 2007
Copyright ©
Nazmythian
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2007-02-10 22:50:57]
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Re: The Beast Within
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by ever1der on
Saturday, 10th February 2007 @ 11:09:27 PM AEST
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wow...powerful naz. I can only make one slight suggestion... these lines:
"you’ve ever come before.
My growling and my prowling
here on this side of this wall,
are mated to your pacing
as you linger in the hall." .... you've NEVER come before, maybe? and on this side of THE wall, so you aren't repeating the word this? just tiny suggestions.
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Re: The Beast Within
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by yangdantien on
Saturday, 10th February 2007 @ 11:13:37 PM AEST
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Pow & wow a tight use of language with a great format.
Of all the things I felt after reading this the strongest being to reach for things beautiful as it is beauty that tames 'The Beast Within'
Bravo
Peace
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Re: The Beast Within
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by shelby on
Sunday, 11th February 2007 @ 06:32:28 PM AEST
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Intense at its best. My pleasure to read this.
~Michelle~ |
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Re: The Beast Within
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 11th February 2007 @ 08:20:21 PM AEST
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Scott, my friend .. sometimes you scare me!
lol
(sorry hun .. couldn't resist). ahem!
Nazzy, I think I know this beast .. and it is a wild and very incessant creature. I sometimes
wonder, does it ever escape late in the night while we lie dreaming? Does it say and do
things, we know not, until we are confronted with the victims ? (same affliction as a werewolf ..)
or maybe this is just an excuse
That last stanza .. god! .. gave me chills. You hit very close to heart with that one, Scott.
Is it possible to allow ourselves to feel and react vicariously through the beast? nah ..
society forbids it. (And sometimes ethics, I think as well ... damn them to hell anyway)
In any case, you captured that devil exceptionally well within the words. So much so,
that I'm sleeping with the light on tonight ..
In a word .. Powerful!!
*hugs*
~Breezy
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Re: The Beast Within
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by PhantomVampyress on
Monday, 12th February 2007 @ 11:13:49 AM AEST
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wow a nicely written expressive masterpiece. on anger.. we all can relate to this.. let the anger out!! great job in writing.. i really like this piece
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: The Beast Within
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by Dom on
Monday, 12th February 2007 @ 01:57:53 PM AEST
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Wow! This is powerful and scary in the way that it makes you think about yourself. I like how the beginning of the poem mirrors its ending with respect to its form.
Dom |
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Re: The Beast Within
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 12th February 2007 @ 09:17:39 PM AEST
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I don't think it's so much our fear of letting it out....I think it needs to come out once in a while.
It's getting it back in that scares the heck out of us!!!
And yes...Love that last stanza! |
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Re: The Beast Within
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 13th February 2007 @ 12:52:36 AM AEST
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wow scott this is awsome piece you wrote.
I
am
far
more
connected
to what you feel yet refuse to show
than you could ever hope to know.
i love that part.
hugs
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Re: The Beast Within
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 1st March 2007 @ 10:56:28 AM AEST
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Naz,
A very creative and thought provoking write, which I found very meaningful.
This poem strikes a c hord with me. My beast withn serves as guardian to the gates for my hideout. It is that inner space where I feel safe, and retreat to whenever I feel a need for seclusion. In all these years we've learned to co-exist; but I feel i'm at the point where I need to individually move beyond the seclusion
Well done sir,
Will/Terry |
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Re: The Beast Within
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by needledancing on
Friday, 9th March 2007 @ 10:39:47 AM AEST
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| This is great...questions of myself as who is my beast within...very well done, provokes a good thought on the beast in others as well....so this is beastly best. thanks |
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