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Scorpion
Contributed by
ipanema_gal
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Saturday, 9th June 2007 @ 09:13:37 AM in AEST
Topic:
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The weather that day was perfect for drowning......
November left the world dead but the sky was clear
Haunted by a previos lively bliss
as the cold left the world to shiver
it lingered and whispered with a serpents hiss
Today is a perfect day for drowning......
the corners of my lips contorted to a smile
As I watched the man lurch forward on the ice
the serpent's loving aisle
A sewing needle in hand
And black ink at his feet
he removed all proof that it was November
handing to me a duster jacket
and it was a perfect day for drowning.....
I watched carefully already dressed for the occasion
A funeral in the making
Draped in mourning black
A crack
A slip
And his sincere smile
the water caressed his lungs into a panic
And soon enough he breathed in paradise.....
I turned to walk away
And would not think of him again
until April's bliss would come
And the papers would dedicate a space
for a man with nothing but a scorpion tatoo
little did the paper
It was a perfect day for drowning.......
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Re: Scorpion
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 10th June 2007 @ 09:20:27 AM AEST
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this is amazing. i was in love from the first line -
"The weather that day was perfect for drowning......"
the imagery is great, and it's definitely dark - most of the best poetry is dark, in my opinion. Dark poetry is real...
love it..truly, i do.
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Re: Scorpion
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by xXInkInMyVeinsXx on
Sunday, 30th May 2010 @ 12:31:55 PM AEST
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| I can't believe I found this in the least read poems section. You have some serious talent. |
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Re: Scorpion
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by Smigit on
Tuesday, 8th June 2010 @ 04:51:27 PM AEST
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| Why not a song with the first line? Catchy. |
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Re: Scorpion
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by JackDylan on
Wednesday, 7th July 2010 @ 06:13:06 AM AEST
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| This is fantastic :) |
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