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I used to think i love you but now i know it's not so,
I used to say you love me,
But now that's all a lie,
I used to like to hold you,
But now I think that you should die,

Promises you make to me,
Promises you lie,
Death is the only truth i know,
Life was too hard to show,
please take away my pain,
My suffering is lost in destain,

I used to think i know it all,
I know now that im wrong,
I used to think i love you,
I know now that your gone,
Im sorry that i left you,
a day another dawn.
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i used to

Contributed by fadingaway on Monday, 9th July 2007 @ 03:46:17 PM in AEST
Topic: abstract

I used to think i was invincable but now i really know,
I used to think i love you but now i know it's not so,
I used to say you love me,
But now that's all a lie,
I used to like to hold you,
But now I think that you should die,

Promises you make to me,
Promises you lie,
Death is the only truth i know,
Life was too hard to show,
please take away my pain,
My suffering is lost in destain,

I used to think i know it all,
I know now that im wrong,
I used to think i love you,
I know now that your gone,
Im sorry that i left you,
a day another dawn.

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Re: i used to (User Rating: 1 )
by Butterat_Zool on Monday, 9th July 2007 @ 05:12:33 PM AEST
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I appreciate abstract poetry as a genre, and the fact that this was alcohol-inspired, but this poem offers little in the way of concrete images, and that has an effect on the final piece that you don't seem to be aware of. Lines like "now that's all a lie" or "life was too hard to show" are good general tone-builders and convey strongly the frustration, disappointment, and tension that went into writing this piece, but read almost like secrets. As a stranger, i don't know what lies were told, or how life became hard, but inserting even one image into the poem, like learning that you were cheated on, or the feeling of being slapped across the face during a fight, would make your words not only more powerful, but also more relateable. I can see that you feel bad, but until your pain makes ME feel bad, too, it's hard to empathize with you. Keep writing!

BZ.

Re: i used to (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Monday, 9th July 2007 @ 06:21:16 PM AEST
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I heard that.
Great venting. I very seldom drink but ocassionally I get titpsie.
I know when one in intoxacated even if they remember or not the guard comes down and the truth comes out or least for me.
huggs, smiles,
emy

Re: i used to (User Rating: 1 )
by brew on Monday, 9th July 2007 @ 11:27:36 PM AEST
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Writing is somewhat abstract.its from the deep inner feels......I thought you penned a write from the depths that showed your most truth. Keep penning, your fine.

Brew~

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