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[sid] => 136069
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => honor of wilting
[time] => 2007-07-19 02:59:36
[hometext] => ~my son went to a creative writing camp and when he came home; gave me 2words and a 3minute challenge-heres what came aboutO:
[bodytext] => °´°*ø,¸¸,ø*°´°*ø,¸¸,ø*°´°*ø,¸¸,ø*°´°*ø,¸¸,ø*°´°*
alas, the moon had gone to sleep
whilst flowers lay within their keep
awoke to sunbeams shining down
photosynthesis prevailed upon ground,
~*~
touching leaves and outfurled petals
lapping up the morning dew, all
for growing in most melodious climb
across fence row roared great vine,
~*~
one bitsy flower gathered courage
from the long shadows oh so cool
alone from the sun she loved so well
whilst in her heart a story to tell,
~*~
tiny seeds formed; lay deep within
as this once more a new day begins
with all her might, sinew and vigor
she sent her heart out on a limb,
~*~
a butterfly stopped in a while
quickly fluttering sharing a smile
then off to places and parts unknown
wherever butterflies call their home,
~*~
warmth touched, leaves spread, believe
it so and it shall be; her petals exploded
the reach be far; the fight unfaire
how to get from here to there,
~*~
beauty, scent and loveliness -this
from harsh suns sweet caress -O bliss
be known throughout community vine
this day turned wonderfully fine,
~*~
with exception to those berry birds
who circled thoughtlessly several times
passing hours waiting for fruits to form
the flowers thunk most out of their minds,
~*~
all at once came afternoon
her flower friends dizzy in the swoon
a burst of growth they blossomed out
around the fence there was a pout,
~*~
a tiny child came and picked along
through strong enamel of her soul,
to fill up prettiest flowers for the table
by his mothers dinner rolls,
~*~
as night came, so too frantic feet
such running down this path discreet
mother reunited son and twilight sang
one flower fell as laughter rang.
§* *§
*|*
[comments] => 18
[counter] => 569
[topic] => 27
[informant] => ladyfawn
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[acomm] => 0
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[score] => 60
[ratings] => 12
[editpoem] => 1
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honor of wilting
Contributed by
ladyfawn
on
Thursday, 19th July 2007 @ 02:59:36 AM in AEST
Topic:
NaturePoetry
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°´°*ø,¸¸,ø*°´°*ø,¸¸,ø*°´°*ø,¸¸,ø*°´°*ø,¸¸,ø*°´°*
alas, the moon had gone to sleep
whilst flowers lay within their keep
awoke to sunbeams shining down
photosynthesis prevailed upon ground,
~*~
touching leaves and outfurled petals
lapping up the morning dew, all
for growing in most melodious climb
across fence row roared great vine,
~*~
one bitsy flower gathered courage
from the long shadows oh so cool
alone from the sun she loved so well
whilst in her heart a story to tell,
~*~
tiny seeds formed; lay deep within
as this once more a new day begins
with all her might, sinew and vigor
she sent her heart out on a limb,
~*~
a butterfly stopped in a while
quickly fluttering sharing a smile
then off to places and parts unknown
wherever butterflies call their home,
~*~
warmth touched, leaves spread, believe
it so and it shall be; her petals exploded
the reach be far; the fight unfaire
how to get from here to there,
~*~
beauty, scent and loveliness -this
from harsh suns sweet caress -O bliss
be known throughout community vine
this day turned wonderfully fine,
~*~
with exception to those berry birds
who circled thoughtlessly several times
passing hours waiting for fruits to form
the flowers thunk most out of their minds,
~*~
all at once came afternoon
her flower friends dizzy in the swoon
a burst of growth they blossomed out
around the fence there was a pout,
~*~
a tiny child came and picked along
through strong enamel of her soul,
to fill up prettiest flowers for the table
by his mothers dinner rolls,
~*~
as night came, so too frantic feet
such running down this path discreet
mother reunited son and twilight sang
one flower fell as laughter rang.
§* *§
*|*
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ladyfawn
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Re: honor of wilting
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by PhantomVampyress on
Thursday, 19th July 2007 @ 03:16:54 AM AEST
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wow this is really delightful and lovely for a 2-3 min write.. well done.. awesome job and great imagery on this .. lovely !!
rock on,
vampyress Jenni |
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 19th July 2007 @ 03:50:12 AM AEST
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| i would also like to add to my *note: that it took me close to an hour to correct spelling and decipher my chicken scratch on the paper! lol ~so i do not feel i met his challenge; only the first 3 stanzas were in the allotted time period and legible. xxx |
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Re: honor of wilting
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by christsfollower on
Thursday, 19th July 2007 @ 11:26:15 AM AEST
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| that was.. strangely and hauntingly moving. I thought it was wonderfully creative and you definitely did wonders within the rhyme scheme. congratz on a beautiful poem. |
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Re: honor of wilting
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by Crow on
Thursday, 19th July 2007 @ 01:27:37 PM AEST
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| Nessa you did a great job,,nice work. thats more than I write in a week!..Vincent |
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Re: honor of wilting
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by myheartsvoice on
Thursday, 19th July 2007 @ 03:16:47 PM AEST
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How beautifuly vivid, i felt as though i was there, i enjoyed this imencly, a nice blissful feel to it.
((((Nessa))))
Ben |
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Re: honor of wilting
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 19th July 2007 @ 06:38:03 PM AEST
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| Poem is exquisite, Such a poem comes along occasionaly and one reads it three or four times even then it is difficult to find the right words to display one's pleasure. Thank you for sharing bern. |
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Re: honor of wilting
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by brew on
Thursday, 19th July 2007 @ 09:40:29 PM AEST
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just lovely.words flowed nicely and i love the whole write......was a calming feel. Great job......
brew~ |
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Re: honor of wilting
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by shelby on
Friday, 20th July 2007 @ 02:53:18 AM AEST
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wow! you took this and ran with it! Beautiful, I loved the detail, flow, meter, the images everything.You created a lovely write here as you always do.
Michelle |
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Re: honor of wilting
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by emystar on
Friday, 20th July 2007 @ 09:17:44 AM AEST
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Great job girlfriend.
I just wonder what the two words were. I can't beleive I'm the only one that ask.
huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: honor of wilting
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by deadheadpoet on
Friday, 20th July 2007 @ 11:00:58 AM AEST
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Oh Nessa,
What a lovely story...with mixed feelings of happiness and sadness at the plucking of the flowers at the end.
Wonderful piece.
Much peace, love and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: honor of wilting
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 20th July 2007 @ 01:50:44 PM AEST
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Yes and who can compete with you lol.
You did a fine job on this awsome.
hugs |
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Re: honor of wilting
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by MisfitMe on
Sunday, 22nd July 2007 @ 11:43:26 AM AEST
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This is unbelievably precious...
My daughter & I, also share the connection of writing.
Ah, the pen is mighty, is it not...
BEAUTIFUL!
BigLoveMuchPeace
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Re: honor of wilting
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by Nazmythian on
Sunday, 22nd July 2007 @ 11:44:12 AM AEST
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I am with Emy ...
What the heck were those two words ?
2 words and 3 minutes ... even if you had to go back and decipher it, what a wonderful way to prompt creativity.
Lovely, Nessa
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: honor of wilting
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by Silent-No-More on
Monday, 23rd July 2007 @ 01:58:13 AM AEST
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Wow.
Super title (the honor of wilting.... ahhhh, yes) and the author's note let's us appreciate even more what you've done here. I did see your comment - but regardless of how much of this was actually on the page in those first few minutes, you most definitely did rise to the challenge and the result is impressive. I think I would have been stymied by it... after three minutes, I'd probably only have two words on the page (the two given to me)! LOL
Great job!
~Snemmy |
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Re: honor of wilting
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 30th July 2007 @ 10:23:49 AM AEST
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Nessa, WOW!!!! That opening line is infinitely poetic, my friend. What an exceptionally emotive piece.
I was reminded, whilst reading, of family reunions, hot sun pouring down, as we ran through fields of wild flowers ...
too gorgeous even for my words. And how the heck did you get such perfection out so fast? Humbled, I am.
Beautiful, beautiful write my friend.
@ -------->----
~Breezy
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Re: honor of wilting
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by Dom on
Saturday, 18th August 2007 @ 07:42:30 PM AEST
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Wow Nessa this is wonderful, almost stream of consciousness writing. To be able to take three minutes work and extend it into a piece of this beauty is incredible indeed!
I love the ideas and metaphors contained in this, and how it so exquisitely touches all the senses.
Stunning!
Dom |
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Re: honor of wilting
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by colinb on
Saturday, 5th July 2014 @ 04:44:42 PM AEST
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| beautifully written as always |
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Re: honor of wilting
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by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 10th November 2014 @ 12:23:44 PM AEST
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This is a-ma-zing!!!
Are you serious? You wrote this in 3 minutes? Good God, what were those two magical words?! This is so imagery laden and smile-inducing to read.
How wonderful to read this now. Way to go, son! :)
~Scorp |
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