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[aid] => mick
[title] => ~Revolution in Rhyme~
[time] => 2007-07-22 12:45:11
[hometext] => This was twice inspired...1st my daughter was asked explain her understanding of the Declaration of Independence for class & I decided to join her. 2ndly, I just read Ladyfawns write inspired by her son & felt embolden to share my own homework.
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Unlike colonies who've before succumb~
to a lack of freedom thats left them numb
We've instead come to as one raise our voice~
& demand a destiny of our own choice...
Our want is simply of liberation~
& to that end make this declaration
No longer will our allegiance you hold~
for distance alone has not made us so bold...
But, the birth of our own ideology~
for which we are offering no apology
Yet, would ask your respectful observance of~
as the rights of all men are granted above...
This assertion of our independence~
from both your usury & your presence
Has been made mindful that war from could ensue~
& our blood spill for the chance to happiness pursue...
So, back across the waters take your crown & throne~
for these children of which, out of reach have grown
In a homeland of vast beauty by us alone tamed~
unto ourselves a sovereign nation now claimed!!!
Happy Belated Birthday, America!
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
BigLoveMuchPeace
~misfitme~
I would like it noted that this is my understanding
of the Declaration & not necessarily my personal
opinions...Otherwise I'd have at least added the
rights of all men AND women...
*wink*
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~Revolution in Rhyme~
Contributed by
misfitme
on
Sunday, 22nd July 2007 @ 12:45:11 PM in AEST
Topic:
Patriotic
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~~~~~~~
~~~~~
~~~
Unlike colonies who've before succumb~
to a lack of freedom thats left them numb
We've instead come to as one raise our voice~
& demand a destiny of our own choice...
Our want is simply of liberation~
& to that end make this declaration
No longer will our allegiance you hold~
for distance alone has not made us so bold...
But, the birth of our own ideology~
for which we are offering no apology
Yet, would ask your respectful observance of~
as the rights of all men are granted above...
This assertion of our independence~
from both your usury & your presence
Has been made mindful that war from could ensue~
& our blood spill for the chance to happiness pursue...
So, back across the waters take your crown & throne~
for these children of which, out of reach have grown
In a homeland of vast beauty by us alone tamed~
unto ourselves a sovereign nation now claimed!!!
Happy Belated Birthday, America!
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
BigLoveMuchPeace
~misfitme~
I would like it noted that this is my understanding
of the Declaration & not necessarily my personal
opinions...Otherwise I'd have at least added the
rights of all men AND women...
*wink*
Copyright ©
misfitme
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2007-07-22 12:45:11]
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Re: ~Revolution in Rhyme~
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 22nd July 2007 @ 01:12:10 PM AEST
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written with heartfelt presence of soul, simply beautiful,
hugs n' love nessa
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Re: ~Revolution in Rhyme~
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by Crow on
Sunday, 22nd July 2007 @ 01:39:14 PM AEST
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| this is a fine write, reminder what we have in this land..I`ve been to different shores everything that is given me here is gone..this is a great Nation believe me..Vincent |
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Re: ~Revolution in Rhyme~
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by FRANCO on
Sunday, 22nd July 2007 @ 09:43:14 PM AEST
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Beautiful write, Independence and freedom has been spoken again and again by many but what makes your poem unique is the style of simplicity that you have brought into this poem for young ones to understand.
Wonderful work.
FRANCO.
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Re: ~Revolution in Rhyme~
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 22nd July 2007 @ 11:27:00 PM AEST
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A wonderful piece of patriotism sweets.
Written with passion and understanding. No matter
what you write about it .. you truly give it your all, hun
Beautifully poetic ~
~Breezy |
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Re: ~Revolution in Rhyme~
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 23rd July 2007 @ 04:41:03 PM AEST
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*Sweet MissyMe*
Girl I have missed you and your fabulous writings my dear friend. It's been awhile and alot has gone on since I have been away, but I must say it always gives me great pleasure to stop by and visit your pages hun. You have the making of greatness in you and I love your diversity as a writer. Whatever you write about you always do it with style my dear friend.
"A Happy Belated Birthday, America" with love from the land down under *wink*
*hugs you tight* ur fan/friend,
sue m |
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Re: ~Revolution in Rhyme~
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by deadheadpoet on
Tuesday, 24th July 2007 @ 01:45:55 AM AEST
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My sweet sister....wonderful rhyming here, you made it fun to read. I must say (cause that's how I am) *smiles* Our darn forefathers came here and invaded Indian Territory...so wow "our" independence was gained by stealing other's. Ouch... and they didn't teach me that when I was in school.
Right on with the write though Kerry. As always you make everything a joy to read....even the darned old Revolution. *smiles*
Love ya sis....peace always,
Me |
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Re: ~Revolution in Rhyme~
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by myheartsvoice on
Wednesday, 25th July 2007 @ 03:42:01 AM AEST
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You are the embodiment of insperation and i was inspired by these beautiful words to post such a comment as this. most lovely as always and truly worth the read. I was right all has fallen in place in your life now . . .
((((MM))))
Ben |
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Re: ~Revolution in Rhyme~
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 28th July 2007 @ 03:58:49 AM AEST
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This is a wonderful piece of artistic perfection, Missy. Make me wanna play John Wayne! Not many chances to git on the internet these days, but sure glad I stopped by here to read this. Miss ya, Misfit.
wabl
KenMoore
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