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[title] => Longing Through A Whisper (ReWrite)
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[bodytext] => In a breathless voice I whisper, a name that can’t be shared,
As thoughts of you consume my soul and all I am is bared,
Each day and night a mystery, life’s course a winding road,
While the darkest corners of my heart hold secrets yet untold.
Like reflections in a mirror, I dream of you each night,
Reflections that are shattered when you come into my sight.
For manifest, I’m powerless, in you my dreams come true,
And I beg for mercy at your feet, there’s nothing I can do.
Your image in my heart has been captured for all time,
Though it's me who has been captured, your beauty so sublime.
Blindfolded by the shadows, our love that cannot be,
My longing through a whisper is all you'll ever see.
By: Doug Morton
http://wordpoet.tripod.com
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Longing Through A Whisper (ReWrite)
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wordpoet
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Tuesday, 4th March 2003 @ 07:00:00 AM in AEST
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In a breathless voice I whisper, a name that can’t be shared,
As thoughts of you consume my soul and all I am is bared,
Each day and night a mystery, life’s course a winding road,
While the darkest corners of my heart hold secrets yet untold.
Like reflections in a mirror, I dream of you each night,
Reflections that are shattered when you come into my sight.
For manifest, I’m powerless, in you my dreams come true,
And I beg for mercy at your feet, there’s nothing I can do.
Your image in my heart has been captured for all time,
Though it's me who has been captured, your beauty so sublime.
Blindfolded by the shadows, our love that cannot be,
My longing through a whisper is all you'll ever see.
By: Doug Morton
http://wordpoet.tripod.com
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Re: Longing Through A Whisper (ReWrite)
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 4th March 2003 @ 07:28:25 AM AEST
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this is really great,you have captured alot of emotion here.love your work
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Re: Longing Through A Whisper (ReWrite)
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by starlight on
Tuesday, 4th March 2003 @ 08:23:34 AM AEST
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| This was well written. Thanks I enjoyed it |
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Re: Longing Through A Whisper (ReWrite)
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 4th March 2003 @ 11:12:02 AM AEST
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Your soul speaks volumes,
through writing,breathtaking poetry!
:::whispers:::: Excellent!!!!
Angel always.....Godspeed! 0:-) |
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Re: Longing Through A Whisper (ReWrite)
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by DreamWeaver on
Tuesday, 4th March 2003 @ 05:48:12 PM AEST
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| Doug .. I've read both poems many times over ... and both are equally as powerful ... although this one you obviously feel says what you want to say in a better way ... and I also feel it expresses your feelings just a little better .. particularly I like the last two lines ... Jan |
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 4th March 2003 @ 07:49:22 PM AEST
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| yes, i think this is much stronger in a subtle way that has more feeling, good job, always nessa |
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Re: Longing Through A Whisper (ReWrite)
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 5th March 2003 @ 10:19:29 AM AEST
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| Awesome. Very enjoyable to read. Such very deep feeling put to words. Powerful. Wonderful. |
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Re: Longing Through A Whisper (ReWrite)
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by Lia on
Thursday, 6th March 2003 @ 01:24:04 PM AEST
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| Ok Doug...I had to copy and paste them both into a notebook so I could look at both of them side by side to compare the two. Once again you have managed to capture my attention. Both are similar in content and meaning, but if you look into them close enough, you see they are both very different. In any measure you have got both my heart and my mind moving with them. I enjoy reading your work. Sometimes it feels as though they were written just for me and I wonder how you are able to step into me like that. Then I realize that hey, maybe I am not the only person in this world that feels this way sometimes. And that, is good writing :) Keep em comin Doug!! |
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Re: Longing Through A Whisper (ReWrite)
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by wordsy on
Tuesday, 11th March 2003 @ 09:16:07 AM AEST
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Has a nice smooth flow.
well done,
wordsy. |
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Re: Longing Through A Whisper (ReWrite)
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by LadyDama on
Tuesday, 11th March 2003 @ 02:31:48 PM AEST
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| this touches that dark suppressed area of our hearts that deals with sad heartbreak... this poem is beautiful... blessings... |
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Re: Longing Through A Whisper (ReWrite)
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by karoody on
Wednesday, 19th March 2003 @ 02:44:13 PM AEST
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my friend, i am amazed. how do you make something so beautiful better? so much soul, so much emotion in both. i would be flattered to have you give me tips.
kara |
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Re: Longing Through A Whisper (ReWrite)
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by exiled on
Friday, 21st March 2003 @ 06:34:19 AM AEST
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all i have to say is this is beautiful chills ran down my spine as i read it because it is exactly how i feel about a very beautiful and woman inside and out. thank you for this poem.
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Re: Longing Through A Whisper (ReWrite)
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by PrincessPage on
Monday, 24th March 2003 @ 04:09:16 PM AEST
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| I really liked your poem - i can really relate to it and i think a lot of people also can to - nothing i could really say would do any justice because its been said so many times but still...i thought your poem was lovely. |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 10:44:37 AM AEST
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omg the first write gave me chills... but this one ... i can't even describe the feeling... you are so amazing... what are you going to do next?!!!
~Crystal~ |
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Re: Longing Through A Whisper (ReWrite)
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by PumpkinPie on
Friday, 16th January 2004 @ 12:43:01 AM AEST
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Wordpoet, this was written with beauty and grace and has touched me deeply.
PumpkinPie |
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Re: Longing Through A Whisper (ReWrite)
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by PumpkinPie on
Thursday, 5th February 2004 @ 03:05:43 AM AEST
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Dearest wordpoet,
How beautiful a poem on a love that can never be it seems to be in your poem)..I felt your words and lived in them.Thanks for sharing,
PumpkinPie |
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