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Array ( [sid] => 145221 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Heartbroken poem [time] => 2008-09-17 08:05:17 [hometext] => This is one of my first poems...and i need people to be honest and comment it please.. [bodytext] => Pretender shadow blonde
Useless body with me, precious mind with another
Looks into my eyes wishing it was anothers'
Takes care of me yet hopes I'd die
Her broken heart i tried to mend, and mine crumbled along the way

Now she's gone, pretender shadow blonde
Stepped on my dead heart on the way out
Her heart fixed, but mine broken
should've stopped her but at the same time couldnt..for she was the most beautiful above all others
And should she ever come back..a new chapter of self-inflicted pain would start.. [comments] => 4 [counter] => 458 [topic] => 72 [informant] => goregio [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => self-harmpoetry )

Heartbroken poem

Contributed by goregio on Wednesday, 17th September 2008 @ 08:05:17 AM in AEST
Topic: self-harmpoetry

Pretender shadow blonde
Useless body with me, precious mind with another
Looks into my eyes wishing it was anothers'
Takes care of me yet hopes I'd die
Her broken heart i tried to mend, and mine crumbled along the way

Now she's gone, pretender shadow blonde
Stepped on my dead heart on the way out
Her heart fixed, but mine broken
should've stopped her but at the same time couldnt..for she was the most beautiful above all others
And should she ever come back..a new chapter of self-inflicted pain would start..

Copyright © goregio ... [ 2008-09-17 08:05:17]
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Re: Heartbroken poem (User Rating: 1 )
by Sasha on Wednesday, 17th September 2008 @ 10:19:58 AM AEST
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very well written indeed..i love this poem.

Re: Heartbroken poem (User Rating: 1 )
by karoody on Wednesday, 17th September 2008 @ 11:46:30 AM AEST
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If this is one of your first, i shudder at your pen. This poem has so much truth so much emotion about the way life works sometimes. It is one of our sad ironies that we watch. I en joyed reading and look forward to more.

Re: Heartbroken poem (User Rating: 1 )
by Puppy on Thursday, 18th September 2008 @ 03:33:08 AM AEST
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this was a great poem i really felt your pain&i can so relate! great write!

Puppy :)

Re: Heartbroken poem (User Rating: 1 )
by weepingXxwillows on Sunday, 26th October 2008 @ 04:04:23 AM AEST
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I envy your writing skills! This poem is great in general, not just being good for a first time.
I could really tell the emotion you put in this.

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