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Array ( [sid] => 148074 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => December Suicide [time] => 2009-02-20 11:45:12 [hometext] => I wrote this for my band, it's about my struggles with mental ailment and how no one can see the pain one goes through because the wounds aren't obvious, they're internal. Tell me what you think! [bodytext] => There’s a light in my heart that can’t stand its reflection
And it’s bent and it’s broken from its own self prevention
To the higher ups it seem it is just playing dead
But when that smoke has all cleared it is still in the red

It crawls up in bed in my head and wonders why
How the others go along with the waves crashing by

Just please understand that one man can’t control
December Suicide
This cancer in my head has infected the soul
December Suicide

The light in my heart is a flame that is weak
From masochistic insight it can’t even speak
It’s done and it’s tired of misunderstood pain
Just throws up its arms and lets the sky rain

There’s a light in my heart whose problems are different
They’re all in the head, so they seem non-existent
It’s fights are internal, self destructive and insane
But no one can see them, so they treat it the same

Just please understand that one man can’t control
December Suicide
This cancer in my head has infected the soul
December Suicide

The light in my heart is a flame that is weak
From masochistic insight is can’t even speak
It’s done and it’s tired of misunderstood pain
Just throws up its arms and lets the sky rain

I struggle to tell you the way that I'm feeling
You don’t understand it, my frustration hits the ceiling
I struggle to push myself to make it through the day
All’s I ask of you God is to make this go away

(Solo)

There’s a light in my heart and it’s fallen asleep
It needs to heal, its wounds are deep
No one would know because they can’t even see
The battles I've seen, so I disagree
[comments] => 5 [counter] => 232 [topic] => 61 [informant] => HERO [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 30 [ratings] => 6 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => selfstruggles )
December Suicide

Contributed by HERO on Friday, 20th February 2009 @ 11:45:12 AM in AEST
Topic: selfstruggles



There’s a light in my heart that can’t stand its reflection
And it’s bent and it’s broken from its own self prevention
To the higher ups it seem it is just playing dead
But when that smoke has all cleared it is still in the red

It crawls up in bed in my head and wonders why
How the others go along with the waves crashing by

Just please understand that one man can’t control
December Suicide
This cancer in my head has infected the soul
December Suicide

The light in my heart is a flame that is weak
From masochistic insight it can’t even speak
It’s done and it’s tired of misunderstood pain
Just throws up its arms and lets the sky rain

There’s a light in my heart whose problems are different
They’re all in the head, so they seem non-existent
It’s fights are internal, self destructive and insane
But no one can see them, so they treat it the same

Just please understand that one man can’t control
December Suicide
This cancer in my head has infected the soul
December Suicide

The light in my heart is a flame that is weak
From masochistic insight is can’t even speak
It’s done and it’s tired of misunderstood pain
Just throws up its arms and lets the sky rain

I struggle to tell you the way that I'm feeling
You don’t understand it, my frustration hits the ceiling
I struggle to push myself to make it through the day
All’s I ask of you God is to make this go away

(Solo)

There’s a light in my heart and it’s fallen asleep
It needs to heal, its wounds are deep
No one would know because they can’t even see
The battles I've seen, so I disagree




Copyright © HERO ... [ 2009-02-20 11:45:12]
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Re: December Suicide (User Rating: 1 )
by Recyclebin on Friday, 20th February 2009 @ 12:01:11 PM AEST
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Great piece my friend.
very deep and intense.
take a bow my friend
~Bin~


Re: December Suicide (User Rating: 1 )
by snoopington on Friday, 20th February 2009 @ 12:18:40 PM AEST
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well done great write.
m.............


Re: December Suicide (User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_K on Friday, 20th February 2009 @ 04:00:33 PM AEST
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Very deep piece of writing... The flow is great....I'm sure it would be a hit with the band and its followers....
Jenni


Re: December Suicide (User Rating: 1 )
by BobStanley on Friday, 20th February 2009 @ 08:01:11 PM AEST
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I think the first two lines of the poem are the best. I know this poem is very personal to you, but as a reader who needs to relate to what you are writing about, I would have liked to see the poem jump from the first two lines of the poem. I also feel that the poem needs punctuation. I am a very literal person, so I guess if it is a song it works good.


Re: December Suicide (User Rating: 1 )
by purplestary on Saturday, 21st February 2009 @ 12:19:23 PM AEST
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I thought this poem was great..very deep and i could totaly relate. I wrote a poem called Invisible Scars..It has the same kind of meaning but it's written in a different kind of form. The words you wrote remind me alot of how i was feeling when i wrote invisible scars..I love it.




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