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[title] => Only if...
[time] => 2009-05-13 20:38:50
[hometext] => The Only if...poem is supposed to make you think. The reader is suppose to make up what the big day was. Who he was. And so on. I like to get your input on what you think what this poem is about.
[bodytext] => I silently sit hoping, dreaming and wishing. Today could have been my big day, today would have been my big day, and today should have been my big day only if…
I hear a knock on my door. “Yes?” I ask. However, no one answers, maybe I dreamt the knock? Who knows? I’ve been dreaming a lot lately. There’s the knock again! So it wasn’t my imagination? Yet it sound like some one is in a hurry. “Yes?” I reply louder than I did before. Nevertheless, no one answers. However, all the sudden I hear laughter! I rush to the doors and open them. No ones there. Then I hear “his” name. Then I hear my father calling for me so gently. Like he use to. And I wonder…Why?
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Only if...
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JKRoser
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Wednesday, 13th May 2009 @ 08:38:50 PM in AEST
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I silently sit hoping, dreaming and wishing. Today could have been my big day, today would have been my big day, and today should have been my big day only if…
I hear a knock on my door. “Yes?” I ask. However, no one answers, maybe I dreamt the knock? Who knows? I’ve been dreaming a lot lately. There’s the knock again! So it wasn’t my imagination? Yet it sound like some one is in a hurry. “Yes?” I reply louder than I did before. Nevertheless, no one answers. However, all the sudden I hear laughter! I rush to the doors and open them. No ones there. Then I hear “his” name. Then I hear my father calling for me so gently. Like he use to. And I wonder…Why?
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Re: Only if...
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by lesoleilnoire on
Wednesday, 13th May 2009 @ 09:16:43 PM AEST
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| Well, this poem really did make me think, and I am not sure I have the right answer, but to me it sounds like the big day might be death. I am probably wrong, but a reader sees elements that a writer sometimes does not in a poem. Great job! |
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Re: Only if...
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 13th May 2009 @ 09:29:35 PM AEST
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Yes I thought on the same lines, I like the mystery element in this write, the knocking on the door yea! The father may be speaking as in God?
Good work here
Michelle |
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Re: Only if...
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by JKRoser on
Thursday, 14th May 2009 @ 12:19:54 PM AEST
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| You guys have your own opinions. Every one's right on this poem. And what my veiw (it is not what the poem's about unless you think this too then it can be) is the same you guys have told me. But like I say, it can be about anything (example: a wedding the groom dying and she's wondering why the wedding hasn't started). Just use your imagination! :) Thank you for posting by the way! I enjoy all your opinions. |
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Re: Only if...
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by twick on
Friday, 15th May 2009 @ 07:00:23 PM AEST
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| to me it sounds like opportunity knocking but you're not sure if it's genuine. |
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