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A Sailors Tragedy
Contributed by
CursedKiss
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Friday, 24th July 2009 @ 06:19:23 PM in AEST
Topic:
AmericanTragedy
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A Sailors Tragedy
Swimming in the waters of the Captain
I slowly start to lose control of the waves
Swimming, Sinking, Stuttering, Screaming
I feel as if I’m dreaming
Inferior to the Captain I’m influenced by his poison
His kiss burning my lips even after he has left
Intrepid, Intoxicated, Intrigued, Intimidated
The coming actions were not anticipated
The Captain’s touch grants me feeble
My Guardian Angel transformed as the Devil
Partying, Pushing, Persuading, Pleading
My words he is not heeding
Retorting with force, but Captain renders me motionless
The Devil strips me of my innocence left bare
Threatening, Thrashing, Thrusting, Throbbing
Seeming unaffected by the sounds of my sobbing
Captain eases my body like a narcotic; a false sense of torpidity
And Ecstasy breaks through the devils atrocity; a guilty pleasure
Disfigured, Disgusted, Disturbed, Disdained
I’m inside out and immediately ashamed
Captain evokes me from this hell
While the Devil leaves the scene of the crime
Abused, Abominated, Abated, Abhorred
My strident cry begging vindication from the lord
A malicious slumber created by the Captain
One at fourteen the Devil already addicted me to
Corrupted, Contorted, Comminuted, Consolidated,
Stuck in an everlasting stupor I was left completely sedated
A calamity brought upon by alcohol and lust
Malevolence achieved through wrongful trust
Irreversible, Immutable, Irremediable, Irrefutable
Forever tainted by his malice I am forever vulnerable
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CursedKiss
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2009-07-24 18:19:23] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: A Sailors Tragedy
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 24th July 2009 @ 11:37:55 PM AEST (User
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This is gut wrenchingly sad and painful. You captured that with excellence with as nice flow.
You have done a fine job conveying the monster that some would refer to as a man. Nice metaphor and I like that you found a way to use a word beginning with the same letter in each third line to convey the emotion.
Welcome to YPDC and thank goodness we have someone else here that does not write text message poetry.
Take care,
Tim |
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