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Tango of Lost Souls
Contributed by
undead_poet14
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Friday, 4th April 2003 @ 06:25:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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This is the Tango of Lost Souls
Many have disappeared
Never knowing the real meaning of love
Going from place to place
Never understanding those feelings inside
This is the Tango of Lost Souls
Without understanding
There is no trust
Without trust
There is no love
Nothing can survive
Without love
Those hands rake you in
Bring you so close, you cant breathe
Youve become a victim
Of their web
Youre free to leave
But there is no escape
Ive fallen to the prey of this sultry dance
Ive been swallowed by the array of colors
Ive now been forced to dance
Dance this treacherous tango
I shall be free never more
This is the Tango of Lost Souls
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2003-04-04 18:25:00]
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Re: Tango of Lost Souls
(User Rating: 1 )
by banjo on
Tuesday, 22nd April 2003 @ 03:08:47 PM AEST
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Not bad. It sort of moves like a tango, a jilty, dark, passionate dance.
The second stanza doesn't really fit with the others. What happens if you take it out? You may have to take out the line about the real meaning of love, too, since the stanza kind of explains that. |
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