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The day gently breathed
Contributed by
charliec13
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Thursday, 17th December 2009 @ 06:28:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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The day rose upwards from the ground, like a breath,
As amber leafed breeze blew softly by our sides.
We stood centered, resting upon one another, in a lonely, fading field,
And without words we began to speak
And the soft, sad sun, told us not to worry,
No matter what.
And so we didnt.
And for an ephemeral moment, we werent anywhere
But we were together, and the day gently breathed
And as the day sunk back down and buried itself into the earth,
And let the moon loose to cool the sky with blue,
We remembered that together,
We did not have to worry.
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2009-12-17 18:28:04]
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Re: The day gently breathed
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by shelby on
Thursday, 17th December 2009 @ 10:59:59 PM AEST
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My kind of poetry, lovely work.
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Re: The day gently breathed
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by Fuzzy on
Friday, 18th December 2009 @ 06:19:41 AM AEST
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Lovely well written.
Take care. |
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Re: The day gently breathed
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by Jimmy_Harlequin on
Friday, 18th December 2009 @ 11:58:46 AM AEST
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this is really good
i know i would feel the same if i lost my girlfriend at the moment.
i feel you captured that strange surrealness of a memory really well and i really think i know how you feel, even though i haven't felt these feelings in a long time.
twas beautiful |
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Re: The day gently breathed
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by charliec13 on
Friday, 18th December 2009 @ 04:23:14 PM AEST
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| Thanks for the feeback guys, you're all really nice. Having read over it a few times I noticed few punctuation mistakes I've made, but not to worry. Any more feedback would be much appreciated! |
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