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Array ( [sid] => 159663 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Unfinished Song [time] => 2010-05-08 10:35:23 [hometext] => This was written during a very difficult time in my life. It's not the best, but it gives an idea of what I was experiencing. [bodytext] => She wakes up every morning and paints the smile on her face.
She dresses to kill with every hair in place.
They all see the image- the life of perfection,
But nobody notices the sinking depression.
She sees where it's going; she knows that it's wrong.
But how does she let go of what she's held for so long?
She fears what they'll say, and if they'll accept her.
She fears that her dreams will go down in disaster. [comments] => 4 [counter] => 239 [topic] => 61 [informant] => CiCi2011 [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 12 [ratings] => 3 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => selfstruggles )

Unfinished Song

Contributed by CiCi2011 on Saturday, 8th May 2010 @ 10:35:23 AM in AEST
Topic: selfstruggles

She wakes up every morning and paints the smile on her face.
She dresses to kill with every hair in place.
They all see the image- the life of perfection,
But nobody notices the sinking depression.
She sees where it's going; she knows that it's wrong.
But how does she let go of what she's held for so long?
She fears what they'll say, and if they'll accept her.
She fears that her dreams will go down in disaster.

Copyright © CiCi2011 ... [ 2010-05-08 10:35:23]
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Re: Unfinished Song (User Rating: 1 )
by sahuvivekanand on Saturday, 8th May 2010 @ 11:11:21 AM AEST
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very good try , i think u succeed in what u wanna express.

Re: Unfinished Song (User Rating: 1 )
by Chamaron on Saturday, 8th May 2010 @ 05:30:52 PM AEST
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Brilliant. I can relate. Expressed perfectly.

Re: Unfinished Song (User Rating: 1 )
by Nevilleconnie on Saturday, 8th May 2010 @ 06:17:36 PM AEST
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Very raw emotions here. While it's depressing, there's no denying the fact that you did an excellent job with writing it. I wish you the best of luck.

Re: Unfinished Song (User Rating: 1 )
by LandsleyAlexandre on Sunday, 5th September 2010 @ 04:59:12 AM AEST
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cool poem

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