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[sid] => 171260
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[aid] => mick
[title] => Battle of thoughs
[time] => 2012-03-12 05:54:34
[hometext] => suggest any other title for the poem
[bodytext] =>
Looking for the One to give this heart a relief,
Striving for that special someone and holding on to beliefs..
Never felt the presence of true love, but pain
Scared of belonging nowhere makes me feel lost in the drift again..
Squinting in misty lights of the strange lands to find a soothing soul,
Looking out for this feeling which i have never known..
Lost in oblivion walking through my own world
thinking about how many times I'll walk pass this peak,
where everything looks blurry and bleak
hope one day i will realize the true rendition of this abstract feeling,
And this illusive world of togetherness will come true........
discov, PLEASE: To help keep this site INTERACTIVE, please read and comment on at least 3 poems for each one you submit if you wish to continue posting.
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[topicname] => Lifepoems
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Re: Battle of thoughs
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Saturday, 16th June 2012 @ 08:25:44 AM AEST (User
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Nice. If I may offer a personal opinion,
I feel less is more when it comes to rhymes
because it sometimes feels forced to me, like it's holding you back a bit.
Good poem though.
Cheers,
Mickey. |
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