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[sid] => 185127
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[aid] => mick
[title] => The Rented Stage
[time] => 2018-05-16 16:12:34
[hometext] => The stage of life
[bodytext] => Did you get the money?
Oh, you got the money;
A star is on the rise,
Just show those eyes,
China blue with a world view
Peering past the lies.
Did you get the part?
Oh, you got the part;
An actress is born,
So far from Kansas corn,
Sign that autograph, they love your laugh
And know you play the French horn.
Did you stay on top?
Oh, you stayed on top,
‘Till the years came and went
And parts to play were not sent;
But you had it all, everyone takes a fall
From the stage we only rent.
[comments] => 3
[counter] => 125
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[informant] => Durango
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[editpoem] => 1
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[topicname] => Lifepoems
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The Rented Stage
Contributed by
Durango
on
Wednesday, 16th May 2018 @ 04:12:34 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Did you get the money?
Oh, you got the money;
A star is on the rise,
Just show those eyes,
China blue with a world view
Peering past the lies.
Did you get the part?
Oh, you got the part;
An actress is born,
So far from Kansas corn,
Sign that autograph, they love your laugh
And know you play the French horn.
Did you stay on top?
Oh, you stayed on top,
‘Till the years came and went
And parts to play were not sent;
But you had it all, everyone takes a fall
From the stage we only rent.
Copyright ©
Durango
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2018-05-16 16:12:34] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: The Rented Stage
(User Rating: 1 ) by softerware on
Wednesday, 16th May 2018 @ 04:26:04 PM AEST (User
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Very clever analogy! Your repeated questions to open each stanza set a new marker for rhyme; provide continuity; and lead the reader to each stage. Nothing has been left to question here; it is a statement that begs agreement, start to finish.
Well planned out, with a message we cannot ignore.
softerware
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Re: The Rented Stage
(User Rating: 1 ) by Invierno on
Wednesday, 16th May 2018 @ 11:50:04 PM AEST (User
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I agree with Soft. Damn fine choice of platform to illustrate that all is fleeting.
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Re: The Rented Stage
(User Rating: 1 ) by JamesStockdale on
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Very unique indeed. Great rhyme scheme too! |
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