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[aid] => mick
[title] => What He Wanted
[time] => 2018-11-05 12:56:00
[hometext] => I flew 1,000 miles to see the one that got away for 43 hours. And now I`m home, and now I`m alone, and now I`m a mess.
[bodytext] => He wanted to know all my secrets,
So I spilled my soul out on his bed.
They were packed so perfectly neat before,
Now I can`t fit them back in my head.
He wanted to see all my scars,
I displayed them for his viewing pleasure.
They were sewn shut so tightly before,
Now I can`t get the seams back together.
He wanted to feel my heart beating,
So I cracked my ribs open for him.
Pounding so hard, it just overheated,
Now I can`t get it running again.
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[associated] =>
[topicname] => LostLove
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What He Wanted
Contributed by
allforyou
on
Monday, 5th November 2018 @ 12:56:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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He wanted to know all my secrets,
So I spilled my soul out on his bed.
They were packed so perfectly neat before,
Now I can`t fit them back in my head.
He wanted to see all my scars,
I displayed them for his viewing pleasure.
They were sewn shut so tightly before,
Now I can`t get the seams back together.
He wanted to feel my heart beating,
So I cracked my ribs open for him.
Pounding so hard, it just overheated,
Now I can`t get it running again.
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allforyou
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Re: What He Wanted
(User Rating: 1 ) by softerware on
Monday, 5th November 2018 @ 07:31:52 PM AEST (User
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Very clever! I like the rocking chair rhyme scheme, and the build up to the finale. You had me at the first line!
We always recall the ones that got away.
I love your memory.
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Re: What He Wanted
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 6th November 2018 @ 03:24:37 AM AEST (User
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// With the title summing everything up, this is an excellent poem. Thank you.
Some people want that "unconditional love" but they sure the /*****/ can/'/t give it back.
Take care of //you//.
Tim |
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Re: What He Wanted
(User Rating: 1 ) by PreciousKitten on
Tuesday, 6th November 2018 @ 05:26:51 AM AEST (User
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i flipping love this poem. the imagery for this poem is so real and raw. excellent work |
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Re: What He Wanted
(User Rating: 1 ) by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 9th November 2018 @ 09:58:09 PM AEST (User
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Loved the raw emotion in this one.
The words pour out in this like your feelings and emotions when you met
Nicely done
Steve |
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Re: What He Wanted
(User Rating: 1 ) by reprobate on
Sunday, 18th November 2018 @ 03:42:58 PM AEST (User
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There are those who will never be satisfied with all of it.
Sounds as if this is one of those instances! I have lived and died in a couple of those moments.
I/'/ve even painted this very same thought...what more can I give when I/'/ve already given everything I am?
Powerful thoughts. Take care!
Thanks for sharing!!! |
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Re: What He Wanted
(User Rating: 1 ) by MoonlitAngel on
Monday, 19th November 2018 @ 10:18:57 AM AEST (User
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this really speaks to me, it/'/s profound, raw. the imagery is so good, I felt every word as I read them. beautifully done. |
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