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[aid] => Mick
[title] => Crimson Release
[time] => 2003-06-06 11:05:00
[hometext] => please please please comment. all comments are welcome, including constructive criticism. thank you.
[bodytext] => Crimson Release
Cut away your sorrows
Cut away your pain
Cut away your emptiness
Cut away the day
A picture you have made
A story you have told
Another night spent crying
Another night feeling cold
Cut away the darkness
Cut away the lies
Cut away the hopelessness
Cut away the demise
You know the cost of bleeding
But now the world may see
All that you can never say
All that you’ve come to be
Cut away your dignity
Cut away your confusion
Cut away your self-esteem
Cut away your delusion
That’s all you are
A crimson pile on the floor
You know redemption is not that far
But the crimson color holds its own allure
Cut away today
And maybe you’ll be free
At least for a second you can forget
All your insecurities
Strawberry gashes on your arm
You don’t think they do much harm
But that was before you looked in the mirror
And saw me staring back in fear
You looked into my soul
I looked into your mind
Then I found out what I was dreading
What I knew deep down that I would find
Those crimson stories on your body
They are identical to mine
That look of sorrow in your eyes
I see me inside
Then I break the mirror
As the pieces shatter to the floor
Then I laugh hysterically
I don’t see you anymore.
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Crimson Release
Contributed by
wild_heart_of_fire
on
Friday, 6th June 2003 @ 11:05:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Crimson Release
Cut away your sorrows
Cut away your pain
Cut away your emptiness
Cut away the day
A picture you have made
A story you have told
Another night spent crying
Another night feeling cold
Cut away the darkness
Cut away the lies
Cut away the hopelessness
Cut away the demise
You know the cost of bleeding
But now the world may see
All that you can never say
All that you’ve come to be
Cut away your dignity
Cut away your confusion
Cut away your self-esteem
Cut away your delusion
That’s all you are
A crimson pile on the floor
You know redemption is not that far
But the crimson color holds its own allure
Cut away today
And maybe you’ll be free
At least for a second you can forget
All your insecurities
Strawberry gashes on your arm
You don’t think they do much harm
But that was before you looked in the mirror
And saw me staring back in fear
You looked into my soul
I looked into your mind
Then I found out what I was dreading
What I knew deep down that I would find
Those crimson stories on your body
They are identical to mine
That look of sorrow in your eyes
I see me inside
Then I break the mirror
As the pieces shatter to the floor
Then I laugh hysterically
I don’t see you anymore.
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wild_heart_of_fire
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2003-06-06 11:05:00]
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Re: Crimson Release
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 6th June 2003 @ 11:54:46 AM AEST
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Wow! This is really good. The only comment I would make is - Why strawberry gashes? I get the colour connection but strawberries are associated with nice stuff and self harm isn't. Really good poem though!! I really enjoyed it!!
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Re: Crimson Release
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by BlackFire9786 on
Friday, 6th June 2003 @ 01:52:07 PM AEST
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| Hey twin! That is an awesome poem! i LOVED it!! loved it loved it loved it! lol. I know exactly how u feel(haha, i'm ur twin) Luv ya lotz! Lisa |
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Re: Crimson Release
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by deadly_blaZe on
Friday, 6th June 2003 @ 03:52:26 PM AEST
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this kicked @$$
i love ur sh*t |
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Re: Crimson Release
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Friday, 6th June 2003 @ 04:35:23 PM AEST
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Awesome write... Welcome to ypdc...
Jenni |
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Re: Crimson Release
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by mystical_illusion on
Friday, 6th June 2003 @ 05:25:11 PM AEST
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Wow, awsome job. Very well done, and explains the momment completely..
thanks for sharing
-kelly |
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Re: Crimson Release
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by wyrd_faerie on
Friday, 6th June 2003 @ 05:26:08 PM AEST
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| aah...this is so good...i know exactly how you feel... |
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Re: Crimson Release
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by MoonlitAngel on
Saturday, 7th June 2003 @ 06:20:52 AM AEST
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This is excellent! Very well written!
~ Moonlit |
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Re: Crimson Release
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by wild_heart_of_fire on
Saturday, 7th June 2003 @ 10:07:00 AM AEST
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| thank you all for your comments...they mean alot. :) |
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Re: Crimson Release
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by DepressingKitsune on
Saturday, 7th June 2003 @ 05:04:12 PM AEST
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| ...*speechless*...this is...touching sounds weak and corny, but eh. |
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Re: Crimson Release
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by MX on
Sunday, 8th June 2003 @ 05:13:34 PM AEST
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i want to do that.cut it all out.that was a 'good' if i may call it that...maybe not...it wasnt a good poem...but it was very well written.i loved it.
when i say it isn't good, i dont mean the way it was written, just the subject *****. |
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Re: Crimson Release
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 10th June 2003 @ 01:35:14 AM AEST
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I really liked it. It's really good. Was it in relation to cutting or seriously cutting wrists, though? Nice discriptions. I like the 'strawberry gashes' because it can be seen as a good thing, as release. :) All good,
Lars |
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Re: Crimson Release
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by wild_heart_of_fire on
Tuesday, 10th June 2003 @ 08:44:43 PM AEST
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| thank you for your coment...it really means alot me...i don't really understand your question but it was seriously cutting...if that answers your question. sorry if that's not what you meant. again..thank you for your comment. |
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Re: Crimson Release
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by BlackFire9786 on
Thursday, 12th June 2003 @ 12:31:20 AM AEST
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| riki, they meant is it about cutting, or trying to kill your self by slitting ur wrists....b/c both can be described w/ ur poem |
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Re: Crimson Release
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by wild_heart_of_fire on
Thursday, 12th June 2003 @ 09:57:10 AM AEST
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| oooooooo....thanx twin....ummmm...it's about whatever you want to interpret it as. love, peace, and chicken grease!!! |
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Re: Crimson Release
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by Hiddendarkness1705 on
Sunday, 29th June 2003 @ 03:25:12 PM AEST
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Very touching poem
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Re: Crimson Release
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by stargazer on
Friday, 8th August 2003 @ 10:16:23 AM AEST
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| I am in complete and utter awe. I am stumbling over the words to descibe what exactly I am thinking... so I won't say them. This was amazing. -Amy |
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Re: Crimson Release
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 8th September 2003 @ 01:35:49 PM AEST
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| 0.0 Absolutely beautiful! I'm too lazy to log in right now, but if you would, check me out! I'm Damaged! So, yeah. I am a cutter, so I know exactly what you mean about the Crimson Relief. Keep it up! You have so much talent! |
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