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[aid] => mick
[title] => Bare With Me
[time] => 2002-08-07 06:21:12
[hometext] => This poem was writen about a close guy friend I had and I. I came up with the idea of the poem because a lot of very bad things had been happening to us at the time, but whenever we were together it seemed like none of our problems even mattered as long as we always had eachother.
[bodytext] => "Bare with me dear, I know it's clear that things have gone awry this year. But hold fast now to what we got whether it be a lot or not. For someday we will look back at this remembering it as a time we will always miss. I'll hold you in my arms tonight, and every night for the rest of our lives if only to make this all seem right."
Sitting there, he pulled me near and whispered "baby, please don't fear" and there we sat away and wept and watched to world slip away until nothing was left. Then as the word came crashing down, while we were together we heard no sound. I gazed into his eyes,he gazed in mine. I sighed and thought "everything is fine".
We sat there motionless, side by side watching as the world was lost. We sat there thinking at the same time, "If we are together the world has no cost".
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Bare With Me
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Kizzikins
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Wednesday, 7th August 2002 @ 06:21:12 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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"Bare with me dear, I know it's clear that things have gone awry this year. But hold fast now to what we got whether it be a lot or not. For someday we will look back at this remembering it as a time we will always miss. I'll hold you in my arms tonight, and every night for the rest of our lives if only to make this all seem right."
Sitting there, he pulled me near and whispered "baby, please don't fear" and there we sat away and wept and watched to world slip away until nothing was left. Then as the word came crashing down, while we were together we heard no sound. I gazed into his eyes,he gazed in mine. I sighed and thought "everything is fine".
We sat there motionless, side by side watching as the world was lost. We sat there thinking at the same time, "If we are together the world has no cost".
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Re: Bare With Me
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Wednesday, 7th August 2002 @ 06:31:45 AM AEST
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Awww..this is beautiful...
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Re: Bare With Me
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by Kizzikins on
Wednesday, 7th August 2002 @ 09:00:09 AM AEST
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| Hi, this is from the author of the poem, I saw that some people gave it a bad score and I was wondering why. I kinda bothered me because this poem is really important to me.So, please tell me why u didn't like it, thanx :) *Kizzikins* |
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Re: Bare With Me
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by Suzy on
Thursday, 8th August 2002 @ 09:07:59 AM AEST
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Hi Kizzikins don't worry about the score people gave you on your poem because everyone has different tastes and some people may like your poetry while others do not...personally I do like your poetry and find this one particularly sweet...please don't let the whole scoring thing get you down...remember visitors as well as members can vote on your poetry...anywho keep up the good writing...
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Re: Bare With Me
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by Chrissylee on
Thursday, 8th August 2002 @ 07:18:13 PM AEST
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| As Suzy said don't worry about the score as people that don't even post in this site rate the poem. I have a suggestion its not a critisism okay when you have a comma after you have written a few words start a new line that way it sets it out in a poem style setting. Its only a suggestion if yuo like the way your poem is set out then just keeping posting as you have been. Your poem was very heart warming and touching keep up the great work. peace love and harmony. |
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