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Card play
Contributed by
vincy
on
Monday, 23rd June 2003 @ 03:25:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I wanted to be open, honest and direct
why did this have to make me defenseless?
Trust and vulnerability
have to go hand in hand!
I have had to sit on nails,
lick my wounds in mute silence.
Forced indifference into my eyes
making invisible tears hard to trace.
I have had to embrace
nothing and no one!
Walking a tightrope and hoping
that I can deal truth out of a deck
stuffed with jokers and wild cards.
So long as I have the king of hearts
somewhere in there
don't matter where.
When the shuffling is over
I can sit back, cut the deck...
what the heck, I may still
get a brake.
Copyright ©
vincy
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2003-06-23 03:25:00]
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Re: Card play
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by full_blur on
Monday, 23rd June 2003 @ 01:57:05 PM AEST
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| This poem rocks! Your card play analogy is developed wonderfully throughout. The "stacked deck" and "king of hearts" work very well to further your message. |
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Re: Card play
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by norm on
Monday, 23rd June 2003 @ 05:24:58 PM AEST
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Your poem makes up for a lot
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Maverick we ain't so don't expect
the deck of life will not reject
nor will advance more than a trance
if you break even you're ahead the dance... |
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