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tuesday
Contributed by
me
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Wednesday, 2nd July 2003 @ 12:35:00 PM in AEST
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oops
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By chance, we met on a train. A massive lady was resting most of her weight on my smallest toe. The scruffily bearded man from the corner shot a yellow-toothed grin my way, and the blast of dirty cigarettes, and regurgitated alcohol assailed my nostrils. I discreetly turned away, and glanced at the assaulted toe instead. You were smirking impishly; those thoughtful, dark eyes fixated on the passing scenes of life, the secret world of every day; mesmerized, not by my beauty, not by the perfection of our surroundings, only by the unfolding of another Tuesday morning.
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Re: tuesday
(User Rating: 0 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 2nd July 2003 @ 07:29:03 PM AEST (User
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Anonymos*
I think you have beautifully captured a moment in time... i feel your emotions and feel as though i am right there.
i aslo enjoy the fact that it's so simplistic and practical... day to day. i think that u've captured something which most people experience on a daily bases.. down to a slow motion time shot.
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Re: tuesday
(User Rating: 1 ) by norm on
Saturday, 26th July 2003 @ 01:51:36 PM AEST (User
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What a great theme...This is the kind of theme that could be the basis for 10 more poems........If you sell the theme, I'll buy it...
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