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[sid] => 24575
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => Love's Torment
[time] => 2003-10-07 18:14:34
[hometext] => *This took me a long time to write and was quite hard to put on paper. I hope you enjoy this.*
[bodytext] => Love has been denied me
An ashen face stares into a mirror
Devoid of hope, filled with disgust
I'm tearing at my heart
So I won't have to feel
There's blood in my hands, but I don't care
I've fallen and I don't have the strength
To rise
I'm running away from love's grip
Holding a cross and beating myself with it
This depression is sharper than any razor
I'm searching for myself amongst these ashes
I'm floating away on the winds of tomorrow
As I softly bleed searching for a
Glimmer of happiness, of a sorrowless night
To taste
Love has been ripped from me
Scars caused by vain intolerance
Mar the youth of this world
As a star falls in silent salutation
Proclaiming its message of hope through despair
I slump to the ground holding my bleeding self up
As the morning emerges and I cry softly
To myself
Death leads me by the hand,
Holds me in its loveless grip,
Tastes my flesh, drinks my blood
Death laughs her painful words of truth
I look into her ebony eyes
And raise my crystal goblet of blood and drink
To Death
[comments] => 15
[counter] => 213
[topic] => 36
[informant] => bobotheclown
[notes] =>
[ihome] => 0
[alanguage] => english
[acomm] => 0
[haspoll] => 0
[pollID] => 0
[score] => 15
[ratings] => 3
[editpoem] => 1
[associated] =>
[topicname] => Suicide
)
Love's Torment
Contributed by
bobotheclown
on
Tuesday, 7th October 2003 @ 06:14:34 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Love has been denied me
An ashen face stares into a mirror
Devoid of hope, filled with disgust
I'm tearing at my heart
So I won't have to feel
There's blood in my hands, but I don't care
I've fallen and I don't have the strength
To rise
I'm running away from love's grip
Holding a cross and beating myself with it
This depression is sharper than any razor
I'm searching for myself amongst these ashes
I'm floating away on the winds of tomorrow
As I softly bleed searching for a
Glimmer of happiness, of a sorrowless night
To taste
Love has been ripped from me
Scars caused by vain intolerance
Mar the youth of this world
As a star falls in silent salutation
Proclaiming its message of hope through despair
I slump to the ground holding my bleeding self up
As the morning emerges and I cry softly
To myself
Death leads me by the hand,
Holds me in its loveless grip,
Tastes my flesh, drinks my blood
Death laughs her painful words of truth
I look into her ebony eyes
And raise my crystal goblet of blood and drink
To Death
Copyright ©
bobotheclown
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2003-10-07 18:14:34]
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Re: Love's Torment
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by BlackFire9786 on
Tuesday, 7th October 2003 @ 06:21:47 PM AEST
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Wow, you really have a way with words, this is amazing....sad....but really beautiful....i would tell you my favorite part, but there are too many, i'd have to rewrite the poem, lol. awesome write, thanks for sharing.
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Re: Love's Torment
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by Jackee_line on
Tuesday, 7th October 2003 @ 06:24:45 PM AEST
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I enjoyed reading your poem, I can see why it was hard for you to write this on paper. It's like you are letting everyone see your open sores.
Excellent write. |
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Re: Love's Torment
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Tuesday, 7th October 2003 @ 07:09:45 PM AEST
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Joel, this is excellent!! One of your best ever!!
This is a masterpiece...
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Love's Torment
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by jaeann on
Tuesday, 7th October 2003 @ 09:24:15 PM AEST
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| wow.......so powerful....a morbid ke sera sera feel to it!!!! |
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Re: Love's Torment
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Tuesday, 7th October 2003 @ 09:24:31 PM AEST
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Beautifully written, so much pain bared within those words.
This poem held me from beginning to end, Without a doubt an excellent poem. |
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Re: Love's Torment
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by Ilhar on
Tuesday, 7th October 2003 @ 09:54:59 PM AEST
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breathtaking in it's darkness, an excellent write
Shari |
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Re: Love's Torment
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by Chanti on
Tuesday, 7th October 2003 @ 10:54:55 PM AEST
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Oo.. Dazzling!
I like it alot! |
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Re: Love's Torment
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Tuesday, 7th October 2003 @ 11:14:16 PM AEST
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| ooo, so dark, a dylan thomas kinda write. I like this!!. |
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Re: Love's Torment
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by EmSal on
Wednesday, 8th October 2003 @ 06:10:21 AM AEST
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Definately a dark poem...but worth the wait or time that you spent on it.
Emma. |
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Re: Love's Torment
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 8th October 2003 @ 07:35:02 AM AEST
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You opened your wounds and bared them for all to see. This poem is truly amazing. So deep and powerful yet so sad. This would definatley have to be one of my favourites from you, though I like all your poems because I can relate to them so well. You write with such emotion and such beauty. I really liked this poem.
Stacey |
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Re: Love's Torment
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by afraid_of_fear on
Wednesday, 8th October 2003 @ 01:37:18 PM AEST
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Wow Joel, you've done it again.. a damn good poem.. beautiful..
x_x_x |
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Re: Love's Torment
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 9th October 2003 @ 12:29:02 PM AEST
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The sound of your soul weeping is quite evident in this somber,gripping,yet beautiful work of art. I pray your soul finds the light...before the goblet absorbs you into the dark abyss. {{{{{Joel}}}}}
Angel always...godspeed my friend...joni |
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Re: Love's Torment
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 11th October 2003 @ 02:34:30 AM AEST
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| dearest joel, this is sooo excellent, love the darkness and ooooo! just all of it:) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Love's Torment
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by Avarice_Riot on
Saturday, 11th October 2003 @ 04:39:40 PM AEST
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| This. Is. Incredible. The fact that it is so deeply personal and emotionally gripping makes it all the more fascinating to read. It's worth the wait, Joel, because this is a terrific piece of dark art. |
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Re: Love's Torment
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by Crimson_Rose on
Tuesday, 30th December 2003 @ 12:19:03 AM AEST
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| What can I say, simply amazing! I know how you feel, being betrayed by the horrible game of love, Genius poem! |
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