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Array ( [sid] => 25930 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => The Frost Sun [time] => 2003-10-28 06:09:55 [hometext] => One for an old friend. This is one of my favorite poems. I hope you like it. [bodytext] => The Frost Sun

the way it’s cold reminds me of you
in the days when all the guys smelt like roses
when we were drifting thru the frost sun

staggering down past the Battery,
like a couple of wanderers

me and you & everyone pure
me and you, always laughing
making that funny connection
only happens, when you’re not even trying,

I can see your face down by the lit beach,
I hear your heart in the wind still,
& we were always so happy, being lonely...

I remember
being just 17,
I remember
the way you changed me

I was the clone in dark sunglasses,
you were the toughest in the clubhouse
you were the cool girl with the gun
you were the only one I trusted
you were the One

yeah, we met in the Sunlight
& we knew the Secret Sides

living in a teenage wave
of lonely hair & hip dreams
drifting thru the cold frost morning
gunning for the real times,
gunning to run

staggering down past the Battery
like a couple of wanderers

& dollface, I still cry
when I think
of all those cool hearts dying

it hurts me some nights so hard
the cold face of my favorite guy
when he just couldn’t smile,
he just kept saying

“hey man, it’s the hard drugs & the bar years
they made me so cold & hard inside,
& I want to be the way I was then,
yeah, I wish things were different
but babe, I won’t fake it,
our beach is a long way away now...”

it hurts me some nights so hard,
the way mirages swallow feelings that were true,
the way the knife cuts into everything,
even gentle summer winds and cool freedom tears...

I just kept moving fast,
I just kept the glasses on,
I went by the Battery all by myself,
I saw the Sun go down and up,
I heard our song play,
I saw our ghosts love and laugh and lose again,
I saw the illusions blow in,
I felt the Winter come, & take something away
take something away...

staggering down past the Battery,
like a couple of wanderers,

when we were drifting through the frost sun,
the stench of roses, through my hair and my hands,
living in a teenage wave
of lonely hair & hip dreams,
gunning for the real times
gunning to run

the way it’s cold reminds me of you
when we were drifting through the frost sun

& I was learning all the things
we don’t really want too,
about how we let things go
just because it’s easier...
& hearts are only things we wear,
they can get torn and so tiried...

yeah, we let things go
we leave the remains,
& we walk from the roadside
just because,
because that’s what all the rose guys do
& people are only blue, or more real
kinda broken somehow...

staggering down past the Battery
like a couple of wanderers

me and you and everyone pure
me and you, always laughing
skipping class to go drivin’

I was the clone in dark sunglasses
& you were the toughest in the clubhouse
you were the cool girl with the gun

all the places that we played
all the lonely friends we made
time sucked everything away

& we both saw
the lights in the eyes change
we both held on
held onto things that were fading

yeah, we both said goodbye
to a place
we can only find in our hearts now

I remember driving till the gas ran out
& by the roadside,
I saw the blue star come right down

I remember the last time I saw you
I remember the last thing I said
I know we’ll grow up and miss this

the way we wiped away each others tears
& we promised never to cry again
because people just aren’t worth it

living in a teenage wave
living through the frost
of lonely hair and hip dreams,
gunning for the real times
gunning to run

I remember
being just 17
I remember
the way you changed me

you were the toughest in the clubhouse
you were the cool girl with the gun
I was the clone in dark sunglasses
and you were the One

& both of us, way out
both of us, so gone

the way the Sun shines down
thru an icy sky
reminds me of you
the way it freezes tears

makes me think of lonely beach days in winter
driving with you forever
it hurts me so hard

I thought getting older would make me numb
I thought I would care less about
cold days in winter,
but I still care now

drifting thru the frost sun
making my heart
the hitting zone
it was the world before scars
it was the world before we got hard

we were two on the beach
we were sitting real quiet in the car as the rain came down
& I didn’t really know what waves meant then
& I hadn’t walked the love edge

the way it’s cold reminds me of you
in the days when all the guys smelt like roses
when we were drifting thru the frost sun

I remember
being just 17
I remember
the way you changed me

you were the toughest in the clubhouse
you were the cool girl with the gun
I was the clone in dark sunglasses
& you were the One

(David Finn, 1999)
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The Frost Sun

Contributed by redlantern2051 on Tuesday, 28th October 2003 @ 06:09:55 AM in AEST
Topic: oops



The Frost Sun

the way it’s cold reminds me of you
in the days when all the guys smelt like roses
when we were drifting thru the frost sun

staggering down past the Battery,
like a couple of wanderers

me and you & everyone pure
me and you, always laughing
making that funny connection
only happens, when you’re not even trying,

I can see your face down by the lit beach,
I hear your heart in the wind still,
& we were always so happy, being lonely...

I remember
being just 17,
I remember
the way you changed me

I was the clone in dark sunglasses,
you were the toughest in the clubhouse
you were the cool girl with the gun
you were the only one I trusted
you were the One

yeah, we met in the Sunlight
& we knew the Secret Sides

living in a teenage wave
of lonely hair & hip dreams
drifting thru the cold frost morning
gunning for the real times,
gunning to run

staggering down past the Battery
like a couple of wanderers

& dollface, I still cry
when I think
of all those cool hearts dying

it hurts me some nights so hard
the cold face of my favorite guy
when he just couldn’t smile,
he just kept saying

“hey man, it’s the hard drugs & the bar years
they made me so cold & hard inside,
& I want to be the way I was then,
yeah, I wish things were different
but babe, I won’t fake it,
our beach is a long way away now...”

it hurts me some nights so hard,
the way mirages swallow feelings that were true,
the way the knife cuts into everything,
even gentle summer winds and cool freedom tears...

I just kept moving fast,
I just kept the glasses on,
I went by the Battery all by myself,
I saw the Sun go down and up,
I heard our song play,
I saw our ghosts love and laugh and lose again,
I saw the illusions blow in,
I felt the Winter come, & take something away
take something away...

staggering down past the Battery,
like a couple of wanderers,

when we were drifting through the frost sun,
the stench of roses, through my hair and my hands,
living in a teenage wave
of lonely hair & hip dreams,
gunning for the real times
gunning to run

the way it’s cold reminds me of you
when we were drifting through the frost sun

& I was learning all the things
we don’t really want too,
about how we let things go
just because it’s easier...
& hearts are only things we wear,
they can get torn and so tiried...

yeah, we let things go
we leave the remains,
& we walk from the roadside
just because,
because that’s what all the rose guys do
& people are only blue, or more real
kinda broken somehow...

staggering down past the Battery
like a couple of wanderers

me and you and everyone pure
me and you, always laughing
skipping class to go drivin’

I was the clone in dark sunglasses
& you were the toughest in the clubhouse
you were the cool girl with the gun

all the places that we played
all the lonely friends we made
time sucked everything away

& we both saw
the lights in the eyes change
we both held on
held onto things that were fading

yeah, we both said goodbye
to a place
we can only find in our hearts now

I remember driving till the gas ran out
& by the roadside,
I saw the blue star come right down

I remember the last time I saw you
I remember the last thing I said
I know we’ll grow up and miss this

the way we wiped away each others tears
& we promised never to cry again
because people just aren’t worth it

living in a teenage wave
living through the frost
of lonely hair and hip dreams,
gunning for the real times
gunning to run

I remember
being just 17
I remember
the way you changed me

you were the toughest in the clubhouse
you were the cool girl with the gun
I was the clone in dark sunglasses
and you were the One

& both of us, way out
both of us, so gone

the way the Sun shines down
thru an icy sky
reminds me of you
the way it freezes tears

makes me think of lonely beach days in winter
driving with you forever
it hurts me so hard

I thought getting older would make me numb
I thought I would care less about
cold days in winter,
but I still care now

drifting thru the frost sun
making my heart
the hitting zone
it was the world before scars
it was the world before we got hard

we were two on the beach
we were sitting real quiet in the car as the rain came down
& I didn’t really know what waves meant then
& I hadn’t walked the love edge

the way it’s cold reminds me of you
in the days when all the guys smelt like roses
when we were drifting thru the frost sun

I remember
being just 17
I remember
the way you changed me

you were the toughest in the clubhouse
you were the cool girl with the gun
I was the clone in dark sunglasses
& you were the One

(David Finn, 1999)




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Re: The Frost Sun (User Rating: 0 )
by Former_Member on Tuesday, 28th October 2003 @ 07:28:19 AM AEST
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Conformity sucks the life out of everything, don't it? It's great to see it from your perspective. I'm in my teens, so I hope I don't go the same way your poem did. Everything has consequences, so make the most of life (basically the idea I got from it). Thank you for posting this, it's shown me something more about my life that I hadn't seen before. Fabulous job on the writing, it's excellent.


Re: The Frost Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by MoonlitAngel on Tuesday, 28th October 2003 @ 03:49:48 PM AEST
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This is spectacular!!! I love every word of it, some parts were like a story I was being told and some parts were like... well, some parts really hit home. I absolutely love it, it's excellent!!

~ Moonlit


Re: The Frost Sun (User Rating: 1 )
by Jenni_Kalicharan on Tuesday, 28th October 2003 @ 09:24:02 PM AEST
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An absolutely beautiful write, David..
This brought back some lovely memories for me..
Welcome to YPDC..
Jenni




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