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O Vim Paraiah's Taele
Contributed by
Butterat_Zool
on
Sunday, 2nd November 2003 @ 12:43:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Once upon
a golden time,
there lived a lass
beyond divine,
With golden hair,
and emrald eyes,
angelic smile,
and oh, so wise.
Could ride a horse,
could dance with swords,
with strength of bears,
and voice of lords.
Could outrun dogs,
make arrows glow,
in the blink of an eye,
to bullseye from bow.
Could outhunt skinners,
and outsmith smiths.
Could outtell clerics
in biblical myths.
The ideal man
in a man-run world,
shed make a fine knight
if she wasnt a girl.
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Butterat_Zool
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2003-11-02 12:43:53]
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Re: O Vim Paraiah's Taele
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by irshprnss on
Sunday, 2nd November 2003 @ 01:38:45 PM AEST
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This is a great poem. I look forward to reading more from you!!
Diana |
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Re: O Vim Paraiah's Taele
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by full_blur on
Tuesday, 4th November 2003 @ 08:37:54 AM AEST
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| This poem has a great flow to it, and although written in a somewhat playful manner, deals with a difficult issue quite succinctly. I really enjoyed it. |
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Re: O Vim Paraiah's Taele
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by EternitysLyre on
Monday, 17th November 2003 @ 04:34:02 AM AEST
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That's so sad.
But i do hope she wasn't comepletely an ideal man; that includes some aspects that simply do not go well with her gender.
The brevity of the poem is one of its strengths, but the depth comes out just a hair lacking. Maybe a bit of how men despised her? (subtly, of course.)
"Ephemeral dreams and perpetual ire;
Melodious lies from Eternity's Lyre"
~The Palatine Poet |
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