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Still Death
Contributed by
Vitreous_Soul
on
Friday, 28th November 2003 @ 09:15:43 PM in AEST
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Motionless the water stands
Like a perfect pane of glass
Frozen still in time
You scream and no one hears
The endless echoes speak
Chanting what you say
The mountains cast a looming shadow
No birds to break the silence
You're standing there in nowhere
As a painting on the wall
Now you're standing still in time
Head fills with ancient rhymes
Are you really alive
When dusk settles in
Quiescence will begin
Can you survive
There's no wind to whip the trees
But still they're stopped in motion
As a photograph
No life to fuel the fire
Nor a drum to march to
Like suspended animation
You're the only one who moves
Now you're standing still in time
Head fills with ancient rhymes
Are you really alive
When dusk settles in
Quiescence will begin
Can you survive
Perfect still the water stands
As the river Styx
People are like statues
In a marble gallery
Trapped in this lifeless world
As a fossil in amber
As a photograph
As a painting on the wall
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Re: Still Death
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by shelby on
Friday, 28th November 2003 @ 09:23:00 PM AEST
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enjoyable read Ill watch more more of your work.This is vivid and rich in detail.
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Re: Still Death
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by doug on
Friday, 28th November 2003 @ 10:11:26 PM AEST
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ive read a few of your poems, there always
good and this one is no exception. great write
your friend doug |
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Re: Still Death
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by Jackee_line on
Friday, 28th November 2003 @ 10:17:52 PM AEST
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I really enjoyed this poem, it was well written.
Bravo!! |
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Re: Still Death
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by Avarice_Riot on
Friday, 28th November 2003 @ 11:41:54 PM AEST
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| Wow, that is one heck of an imagery! Very well-written, as if you're telling a story...I'll definitely be reading this again and again. |
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Re: Still Death
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by lovingcritters on
Saturday, 29th November 2003 @ 12:26:34 AM AEST
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Dear VS, your imaginary in this poem was spectacular! I was right with you and could see with my mind's eye all the things you described as they passed by!
I've done the same as you...just sit still and let those in the world pass you by...but a picture on the wall is even better....I do that alot. Good excercise for your imagination....the moreyou use it the better it gets!
very enjoyable poem
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Re: Still Death
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by Ronald on
Sunday, 30th November 2003 @ 04:34:59 AM AEST
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| This is sure a great poem! You seem to be painting a picture with your words. great job! |
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