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[sid] => 30822
[catid] => 1
[aid] => mick
[title] => Bleed to Breathe
[time] => 2004-01-05 17:09:27
[hometext] => A fellow poet advised me to *let go* more when I write so this is my first exercise in doing so. I'll keep trying till I don't hold anything back.
[bodytext] => When the pain is too much
I crave the blade's touch
But I don't know how to tell you
I need to bleed to breathe
I hide the hurt beneath
And I wish it didn't show through
Sometimes I need to cry
I almost want to die
I'd kill myself before I'd live without you
In my mind I hate this
I hate that you exist
I've taken so much **** from you and I'm through
I'm **** up in the head
Isn't that what you said?
You know I hate what we've become
Wonder if I was wrong
If we really belong
Is there just too much to overcome?
All the thoughts in my mind
Make me wish I was blind
There's a part of me that wants to see you dead
For all the things you've done
Why was I that someone?
And why can't I forget everything you've said?
If everything you knew was true
Was never good enough for you
Would it kill you?
'Cause it kills me
Would you sleep yourself to death
Before you'd take another breath?
It's all inside
Where I hide it
Please don't be angry
I don't want you to hate me
Just because I do
Don't call me stupid
Or think I'm just a little kid
Try to see my view
I know that I'm useless
But please don't abuse this
I love you and I'm sorry
I know I cry a lot
But the tears you see not
Are of blood and I'm sorry
If everyone that ever loved you
Turned their back on you and flew
Would it kill you?
'Cause it killed me
Would you stop feeling just to live
'Cause you had nothing left to give?
I feel the pain
It's not from you
I can't make this go away
And you shouldn't find out this way
But I was scared
I still feel scared
I'm not all that much unlike you
It's not so far from what you do
I need you now
Will you be there?
[comments] => 10
[counter] => 208
[topic] => 32
[informant] => MoonlitAngel
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Bleed to Breathe
Contributed by
MoonlitAngel
on
Monday, 5th January 2004 @ 05:09:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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When the pain is too much
I crave the blade's touch
But I don't know how to tell you
I need to bleed to breathe
I hide the hurt beneath
And I wish it didn't show through
Sometimes I need to cry
I almost want to die
I'd kill myself before I'd live without you
In my mind I hate this
I hate that you exist
I've taken so much **** from you and I'm through
I'm **** up in the head
Isn't that what you said?
You know I hate what we've become
Wonder if I was wrong
If we really belong
Is there just too much to overcome?
All the thoughts in my mind
Make me wish I was blind
There's a part of me that wants to see you dead
For all the things you've done
Why was I that someone?
And why can't I forget everything you've said?
If everything you knew was true
Was never good enough for you
Would it kill you?
'Cause it kills me
Would you sleep yourself to death
Before you'd take another breath?
It's all inside
Where I hide it
Please don't be angry
I don't want you to hate me
Just because I do
Don't call me stupid
Or think I'm just a little kid
Try to see my view
I know that I'm useless
But please don't abuse this
I love you and I'm sorry
I know I cry a lot
But the tears you see not
Are of blood and I'm sorry
If everyone that ever loved you
Turned their back on you and flew
Would it kill you?
'Cause it killed me
Would you stop feeling just to live
'Cause you had nothing left to give?
I feel the pain
It's not from you
I can't make this go away
And you shouldn't find out this way
But I was scared
I still feel scared
I'm not all that much unlike you
It's not so far from what you do
I need you now
Will you be there?
Copyright ©
MoonlitAngel
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2004-01-05 17:09:27]
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Re: Bleed to Breathe
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by Cobalt on
Monday, 5th January 2004 @ 05:19:19 PM AEST
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*Applauds*
Abso*****lutely awesome Moonlit. This was a totally wicked and emotional write. It made me feel what you where. Hope you feel better after getting all that out. Bravo hon. |
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Re: Bleed to Breathe
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by shelby on
Monday, 5th January 2004 @ 05:20:01 PM AEST
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wow!raw powerful words here. This is great. I also have loved every poem you have written.
Michelle |
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Re: Bleed to Breathe
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by SuicidalSon on
Monday, 5th January 2004 @ 05:54:04 PM AEST
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| Now thats what I'm talking about a poem with some feeling, if theres no feeling behind it its pointless to write |
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Re: Bleed to Breathe
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 5th January 2004 @ 05:55:29 PM AEST
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although this is not my style it is very well written and as jeff said hope you feel better and it sounds like a release let it out girl
putteragain
michelle |
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Re: Bleed to Breathe
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Monday, 5th January 2004 @ 06:20:48 PM AEST
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| Personally, I think there's too much "teenage " "oh poor me" angst in here for MY liking. Your other style was alot better, left stuff up to the reader to decipher but I can tell this needed to be written and it couldn't have been written any other way... so good job Moonlit! :) |
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Re: Bleed to Breathe
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by afraid_of_fear on
Monday, 5th January 2004 @ 06:23:02 PM AEST
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This was long but it held me throughout, a good poem, if somewhat angry and sad..
charlotte x_x_x |
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Re: Bleed to Breathe
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by SpreadYourWings on
Monday, 5th January 2004 @ 11:51:36 PM AEST
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| I really enjoyed this poem! Your rhyming scheme was so well! Keep up the work. |
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Re: Bleed to Breathe
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by deathwriter on
Tuesday, 6th January 2004 @ 01:17:04 AM AEST
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I loved it..I feel your pain.."When the pain is too much
I crave the blade's touch
But I don't know how to tell you
I need to bleed to breathe"
I loved that part..keep up the good work and hope you feel better
lots of love,
Kristin |
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Re: Bleed to Breathe
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by Chanti on
Tuesday, 6th January 2004 @ 01:42:44 AM AEST
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Beautiful write! Very powerful.. stay strong
Chanti * |
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Re: Bleed to Breathe
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 18th January 2004 @ 11:39:32 PM AEST
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| your not 'useless' dee, youve a beautiful soul, ...hmm.. your question, if everyone turned their back on me... well, i would have to have a dog, i need animals more than most people, ypdc family not counted in that, i would die without my friends here i just know it, and your one dear friend, please be happy and know i care, and im not going anywhere and you know how to catch me if you want to talk:) big hugs and hey love you:) nessa xx |
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