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keep it inside
Contributed by
Cancer
on
Friday, 9th January 2004 @ 01:05:32 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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i want to scream i want to cry instead, i stare at the wall and clench my teeth
i want to stab i want to shoot i want to kill something that everyone loves instead, i smile and say something to make you laugh
i don't know you but i want to tear your throat open i want to feel your blood blanket my face with warmth i want to hear you gurgle i want to see you fading i want to watch you die instead, i type and do nothing shoving it back down inside
(hugging my knees swaying in this chair only free to be me when no one else is here clawing my face punching myself can't tell anyone else because no one can help)
smothered whimpers that long to be screams my hate burning nations these are my dreams
no ego here i know my place but i don't think you know yours that's why i'm here that's why i'm this way that's why....
it all comes down to them saying "no" when i tried to show them what's inside too deaf to hear too blind to see too stupid to understand too far away for me to reach
i won't scream myself to sleep because i'd never stop just murmur weak threats and empty promises of revenge and snuggle with the razor blade that knows my flesh as "home"
(keep it inside shove it back down don't ever let them see it's far too late if i show them now they'll never set me free)
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Cancer
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2004-01-09 01:05:32] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: keep it inside
(User Rating: 1 ) by MajesticPoet on
Friday, 9th January 2004 @ 01:19:18 AM AEST (User
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Damn that is powerful. A little on the dark side maybe. But powerful. Most people I would say have had some of those same thoughts sometimes in their life. Damn good write. Keep them coming.
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Re: keep it inside
(User Rating: 1 ) by bobotheclown on
Friday, 9th January 2004 @ 01:30:42 AM AEST (User
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Well for starters I LOVED the tone of this poem, which bordered on psychotic. The repetition really added to an already amazing poem. The 2nd to last stanza realy knocked me over 'snuggle with the razor blade' that was f*cking great.
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Re: keep it inside
(User Rating: 1 ) by venkat on
Friday, 9th January 2004 @ 01:37:46 AM AEST (User
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your thoughts are like the waves of a sea emotinally they scream through your mind. but the heart inherently keeps its love and agony..so it smiles.. and cries in a different tune which is not hatred but of suffering..
thanks for sharing this wonderful poem. venkat.
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Re: keep it inside
(User Rating: 1 ) by bluoreo on
Friday, 9th January 2004 @ 02:05:47 AM AEST (User
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I think the poem was well put together, and I can definately relate to some of the subjects you wrote about. Great poem! |
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Re: keep it inside
(User Rating: 1 ) by ShadowDaughter on
Friday, 9th January 2004 @ 03:26:37 PM AEST (User
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Shouldn't be on the computer just now and don't have time anyway, but I just had to comment on this one.
I was impressed beyond belief. Certainly one of your better ones, if not among the best. Insert exceedingly fervent UFAPMOTGF here while I quietly walk off, my eyes still round. |
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Re: keep it inside
(User Rating: 1 ) by Cobalt on
Tuesday, 13th January 2004 @ 12:37:55 PM AEST (User
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Cancer this was such an awesome write. I think I can understand it. Damn good man. |
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