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Array ( [sid] => 32029 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Take Your Last Breath [time] => 2004-01-18 14:52:43 [hometext] => I had a dream very much like so I made it in a poem [bodytext] => Take your last breath my dear
for the end of your life is coming near
take your last breath and take it good
the end of your life is coming just like it should
you may come near to exploding and hurt
you make me want to poke the tack and watch the blood spirt
feelings are just nothing
I won't hurt myself over you
I'm not going to cry or worry
I have better things to do
take you last breath my dear
as I watch you worry in fear
take your last breath and use it wise
because I'm not sticking around and listen to your lies
my hands are starting to shake
as I see the look on your face, so fake
I hold the gun up to your head
as you sit quietly on the bed
now I see everything so clear
take many breaths my dear and take them well
I pulled the trigger
then I fell
I was going to kill you
because the way you made me feel
I learned that feeling inside was the love so real
so when you look up at the stars above
know that I am looking down at you and that I died for love [comments] => 3 [counter] => 171 [topic] => 13 [informant] => sweetpeall [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 5 [ratings] => 1 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => DarkPoetry )
Take Your Last Breath

Contributed by sweetpeall on Sunday, 18th January 2004 @ 02:52:43 PM in AEST
Topic: DarkPoetry



Take your last breath my dear
for the end of your life is coming near
take your last breath and take it good
the end of your life is coming just like it should
you may come near to exploding and hurt
you make me want to poke the tack and watch the blood spirt
feelings are just nothing
I won't hurt myself over you
I'm not going to cry or worry
I have better things to do
take you last breath my dear
as I watch you worry in fear
take your last breath and use it wise
because I'm not sticking around and listen to your lies
my hands are starting to shake
as I see the look on your face, so fake
I hold the gun up to your head
as you sit quietly on the bed
now I see everything so clear
take many breaths my dear and take them well
I pulled the trigger
then I fell
I was going to kill you
because the way you made me feel
I learned that feeling inside was the love so real
so when you look up at the stars above
know that I am looking down at you and that I died for love




Copyright © sweetpeall ... [ 2004-01-18 14:52:43]
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Re: Take Your Last Breath (User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on Sunday, 18th January 2004 @ 03:59:20 PM AEST
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wonderful ! and ooo! i love it:) hugs n' love nessa


Re: Take Your Last Breath (User Rating: 1 )
by Wrybod on Wednesday, 21st January 2004 @ 03:27:54 AM AEST
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I want to say almost the same words as I did to the poem that follows this one.(Players)

This is equally well written and sad.

All the adolescents I meet today are far more sophisticated than fit your dream. But then a dream it was, and well written. Not reality.

bob


Re: Take Your Last Breath (User Rating: 1 )
by Cobalt on Thursday, 5th February 2004 @ 02:13:36 AM AEST
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What a twist. I really liked this. Very good write.




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