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Figure 2
Contributed by
echo44
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Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 05:02:35 PM in AEST
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How can you act like I mean nothing to you when you mean everything to me? Give me a chance, I swear it will be me last, I want to be more than just friends, you and me will be alright, please don't let me be alone another night, I'll do anything to make you see, you with me is all I need, all I am and all I'll be, you make my life so complete, with every single word you say,
makes my heart go insane, when you smile , my heart goes wild, your eyes makes it hard to say goodbye everytime, please be mines, I need you here by my side, I promise I won't make you cry, I'll never leave your side, all these words I say are true, from the first time I saw you, i knew that you are the one from me, no use trying to deny all
these feelings that I hide, time to let you know exactly how I feel, and i don't care if you wanna know, these feelings I can't let go, time to break away from all the pain I hold inside, until the day I die, you'll be
on my mind, every waking thought, I even dream about you, give me one last chance,I swear it would be my last, I won't give up on you, I'm writing it in words so you'll know that its true.
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Re: Figure 2
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by Putteragain on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 05:32:01 PM AEST
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it is good but unstructured not trying to put it down just my opinion it is really good
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Re: Figure 2
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by dizzi_lashes on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 05:59:27 PM AEST
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| wow this is awesome, I am practically going through the same thing right now.... |
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Re: Figure 2
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 06:11:53 PM AEST
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well unlike Putteragain, I like the fact that this is "unstructured"... goes against the grain....
i like this lots... good stuff
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Re: Figure 2
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by Kirby on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 06:21:58 PM AEST
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| You could have worked harder on this and put more emotion into it and it is unconstructed. It was a good write though. Everyone has gone thorugh this and I am still going through this. Keep up the good work! Love:::Kirby |
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Re: Figure 2
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 07:27:27 PM AEST
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| I just think structure goes out the window when you feel you have to say all you must. I think it merits a comment because its unstructured. It reads as though it has been expelled in a long, last, desperate breath. Nice work. |
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Re: Figure 2
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by Necromant on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 07:33:01 PM AEST
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Oh my this is so well described! The emotions are jumping out of the poem! I loved it! hope the one you love notice it as well. Great write!
Anne :D |
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