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Something to death
Contributed by
Cobalt
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Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 11:00:59 PM in AEST
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Blood runs down my face
In perfectly formed riverlets
Drinking hungrily from my wrists
Feeding my lust with dying life
I want to die on this night
Filling my cup to overflow
This hatred so dark yet beautiful
A single black rose I hold
One final sweet gift for you
Climbing the Tower to get you
Standing by your bedside
I'm drenched in black blood
Your green eyes flicker open
In them I see that place
That Sea were you are queen
You rise to meet me excited
Licking blood from my lips
The crimson life from my fingertips
Bare your neck for me to sample
Pulling me to your bed in lust
Try to say no try to fight
For I'm sure it would be death
See my fear and laugh
Flash the sweetest smile
As we go to where you rule
The Sea in turmoil it's me here
On this night lovers will
Commit suicide together
This night when we
The Crimson King and the Dark Queen
Consumate to end all light
Raven's Sin
Copyright ©
Cobalt
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2004-02-19 23:00:59]
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Re: Something to death
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by Kie on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 11:25:58 PM AEST
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Although this poem was dark & mysterious, it echoes with a deep seeded pain. I kept seeing a moth to a flame in my mind. Sex and temptation, sacrifices and offerings, a consumation and ending.
I have no real idea what you mean in this poem per se but I know that it is a masterpiece and mystically enjoyable to read.
Well done Cobalt, again!!
Kie |
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Re: Something to death
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by fldadn1 on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 11:54:20 PM AEST
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| Also i couldn't get the meaning of the poem but enjoy reading poems that are mysterious to me. It's very dark and well written though good poem |
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Re: Something to death
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by fldadn1 on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 11:54:50 PM AEST
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| Also i couldn't get the meaning of the poem but enjoy reading poems that are mysterious to me. It's very dark and well written though good poem |
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Re: Something to death
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 02:45:34 AM AEST
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| Dark chilling and beautiful..intensely emotional..Venkat |
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Re: Something to death
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by sweetangeluk on
Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 06:05:50 AM AEST
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This brought to mind Blade THE FILM due to the vampire content
Enjoyed your poem as much as the film classic
Brilliant
Love SWEET ANGEL UK1 |
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Re: Something to death
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 06:01:26 PM AEST
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wow thats all I can say this was great man so dark and vampirish loved it!!!!!!!!!
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Something to death
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by afraid_of_fear on
Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 08:27:39 PM AEST
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ahh.. this is dark, and dripping with beauty..
charlotte x_x_x |
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Re: Something to death
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 22nd February 2004 @ 03:43:41 PM AEST
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| cheap ass piece of ***** poem! |
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Re: Something to death
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by Cobalt on
Sunday, 22nd February 2004 @ 09:52:12 PM AEST
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I only hope that you read this.
Eat me!
Your pathetic opinion was duly noted and ignored.
Thanks,
Jeff |
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Re: Something to death
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by ShadowDaughter on
Sunday, 22nd February 2004 @ 11:38:17 PM AEST
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Anonymous, hon, --and yes, dammit, I'm condescending to you-- when will you figure out that in inability to comprehend literature with depth, nine times out of ten the fault lies with not the poet but the reader? In shorter, simpler words so you can understand them, you fool, it's not Cobalt's fault if you're too stupid to understand his work. Understand?
And Jeff, nice job. I rather like this one . . .
--Nora |
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Re: Something to death
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by Rakerman1999 on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 10:27:02 AM AEST
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I'd say you've become the master of the dark write Jeff. I am sure that 1 star was supposed to be a 10, the poor schmuck just got confused I guess. :oP
Very well done
Larry |
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Re: Something to death
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 10:43:04 AM AEST
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| really vivid images, it plays out like a vampyre movie in my mind, the suicide a new birth so to speak, im likely way off, lol, i love it tho:) hugs n' love nessa |
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