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hello and good day
Contributed by
remy
on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 01:12:44 AM in AEST
Topic:
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hello...
i've failed, the details will be coming through the mail
all hail the cuts and scratches painted, no: they're impaled
i'd tell you the story but chances say it'd be the phone
i can't dial another number when fingers feel like foam
back home i'm alone but there's nothing that i can do
it's true i'm through and you too don't know what to do
so sue me while the topic is hot off the frying pan
i'll do what i can but not everything you understand
one more wave length, now one more day's end
and one more statement i could just about end
again... and again...
but what then?
i'm thinking that i should end this
i'm feeling incriminated by sexists
forget this.
well hello, oh you know that it's so nice to see you
it doesn't happen all too often, and well: i need you
it feels as if the walls are crashing all around me
don't ask how that relates it just feels confounding
while your presence surrounds me my mouth protrudes a smile
it's something i've forgotten and it's been quite awhile
so sue me, renew me, come to me as now your here
i fear the time will end too soon for us my dear
one more sound wave, now one more statement
one more something abounding in this moment
again... still again...
but what then?
i'm thinking that i will end this
farewell to vagabonding sexists
forget this.
good day!
(okay, don't hate me for it being oh so lovey dovey!)
[and leave a comment if you can...]
Copyright ©
remy
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2004-03-17 01:12:44]
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Re: hello and good day
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 01:42:03 AM AEST
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| well done..beautifully touching. venkat |
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Re: hello and good day
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by Dina on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 01:49:19 AM AEST
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| Oh, I won't hate you. On the contrary, it is lovely written and felt. Do you have some more of this? |
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Re: hello and good day
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by AnGeL_M on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 04:18:58 AM AEST
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Very Touching
Loved It
Nice Write....
,,,,,,,,,Love,,,,,,,,AnGeL,,,,,,,,, |
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Re: hello and good day
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 09:00:40 AM AEST
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*smiles* it's nice to see you write like this....
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Re: hello and good day
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by Overstated on
Wednesday, 24th March 2004 @ 10:54:39 AM AEST
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| very good- some great lines in this - i like the way that this poem has a kind of rolls off ya tongue type of feeling about it. |
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Re: hello and good day
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by Nelly on
Monday, 26th April 2004 @ 06:06:32 AM AEST
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| cool... i love it! |
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