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Array ( [sid] => 47804 [catid] => 1 [aid] => mick [title] => Weeping Sky [time] => 2004-05-16 19:22:31 [hometext] => [bodytext] => This man has
My brown hair
My blue eyes
My light skin
"I'm really going to see him?"
"Yes, yes you are,"
My mother murmured
All I could do was
Move my lifeless hands
And fold my clothes
Into the shivering suitcase
My bracelets sang a song of their own
I was starting to sweat
It was time to leave
My mother grabbed the keys that jingle janggled
I crawled into the sleeping car
And clutched the seat beneath me
I didn't hear my mother wake it from its rest
Until I saw the image in my window shift
The sky started weeping
Its tears blurring the world around me
The car went silent
I spotted a man
He was strolling back and forth
As if waiting for someone
Our eyes met
And then I understood
This was the man with
My brown hair
My blue eyes
My light skin [comments] => 1 [counter] => 183 [topic] => 21 [informant] => _nikki_ [notes] => [ihome] => 0 [alanguage] => english [acomm] => 0 [haspoll] => 0 [pollID] => 0 [score] => 0 [ratings] => 0 [editpoem] => 1 [associated] => [topicname] => Lifepoems )

Weeping Sky

Contributed by _nikki_ on Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 07:22:31 PM in AEST
Topic: Lifepoems

This man has
My brown hair
My blue eyes
My light skin
"I'm really going to see him?"
"Yes, yes you are,"
My mother murmured
All I could do was
Move my lifeless hands
And fold my clothes
Into the shivering suitcase
My bracelets sang a song of their own
I was starting to sweat
It was time to leave
My mother grabbed the keys that jingle janggled
I crawled into the sleeping car
And clutched the seat beneath me
I didn't hear my mother wake it from its rest
Until I saw the image in my window shift
The sky started weeping
Its tears blurring the world around me
The car went silent
I spotted a man
He was strolling back and forth
As if waiting for someone
Our eyes met
And then I understood
This was the man with
My brown hair
My blue eyes
My light skin

Copyright © _nikki_ ... [ 2004-05-16 19:22:31]
(Date/Time posted on site)

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Re: Weeping Sky (User Rating: 1 )
by Fionndruinne on Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 08:27:26 PM AEST
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This paints a very emotional picture. Was it your father you went to see?

I like the poetic references, like the bracelet.
Nice work. Keep it up!
Andrew

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