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prideful arrogance
Contributed by
ladyfawn
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Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 09:40:25 PM in AEST
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*keep talking get it off your chest
whislt i hear morning bird band;
if your ancestors are better
and you know all far more clever
you believe that yours do shine
come from better stock than mine
that you tell me what to write
or of how i feel tonight
if your character is perfect
may it be in time you do reflect
*for you could not see my forest
only sticks and barren land;
a bit of news i have for you
high and mighty just wont do
i have nothing left to say
you've thrown all that away
if your country is more beautiful
and you find fault with our dutiful
then i ask you why so pompous
poison to mares as fescue grass
*you've given off a treasure chest
go to ayers i'll keep my meadowland;
you wish that talk to you i do
that's one dream shall not come true
when you walk old down sydney streets
think of that heart of yours you cheat
for you no longer have your youth
only your dear oblivious truths
look down on me from upperside
be alone then with your pride
*whilst i sleep in charming nest
you go live your life that's grand.
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keep talking get it off your chest
whislt i hear morning bird band;
for you could not see my forest
only sticks and barren land;
you've given off a treasure chest
go to ayers i'll keep my meadowland;
whilst i sleep in charming nest
you go live your life that's grand.
keep talking get it off your chest
for you could not see my forest,
you've given off a treasure chest
whilst i sleep in charming nest...
Signatures By
The Tired Lion
we've only sticks and barren land;
you go live your life that's grand....
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ladyfawn
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Re: prideful arrogance
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 09:44:18 PM AEST
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Wow! Hun this is wonderful! I love the way its set out and everything, just...perfect.
And you go girl! lmao
Love you
Hugs 'n Love
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by Cynthia on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 09:47:57 PM AEST
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| Nessa, wow you really put a lot of work into this write. Excellent indeed my friend. I wish I could write like you. ;o) Maybe one day, you'll inspire me. *hugs* *S* Cynthia |
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by shelby on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 10:17:59 PM AEST
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Nessa this speaks volumes its tasteful yet puts the point across wonderful
Michelle |
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by blueheart on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 10:56:38 PM AEST
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| Anyone can tell that you put in immense amount of effort into this write. Insightful and deep. Any poets would love to write like you. Great job. |
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Re: prideful arrogance
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by reprobate on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 11:02:03 PM AEST
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dear lady, this is just wonderful. I do not know the characters of whom you so eloquently speak but the emotional output is fantastic. The layout is wonderful and I'm going to have to paint a couple of those scenes that you have interspersed in your work. they're great.
great piece. thank you so much for sharing. |
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Re: prideful arrogance
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by lovingcritters on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 11:47:40 PM AEST
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Nessa, I know the poem....but do you think I remember who it is? Enchantingly moving, your images are so fitting to your message. Pictures speak louder than words, and enchance any poem anyone should write. This is marvelous, please tell, don't keep me in the dark........I can't even guess........but loved the words........Prideful and arrogant for sure
Lovely
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Re: prideful arrogance
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 12:12:08 AM AEST
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A memorable write..you are correct when
you say ancestry does not the decide a man's character in the present day society..
hence it is apt to say "if your character is perfect may it be in time you do reflect " then
"keep talking get it off your chest for you could not see my forest, you've given off a treasure chest whilst i sleep in charming nest..."...Those lines are really captivating hugs my friend. venkat
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Re: prideful arrogance
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by AnGeL_M on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 12:26:19 AM AEST
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WoW Nessa What A Beautiful Poem & The Pictures Are Perfect !!!!!!!!!! Masterfully Written G/F :-) Keep em Coming !!!!!!!!
******LoVe**AnGeL*******
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by bernard on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 01:37:41 AM AEST
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Another first class poem. i bet you felt a lot better after you got that of your chest and the pictures are a treat. Thanks a lot.
bernard. |
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by SweetRhythm on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 03:51:59 AM AEST
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This is really quite a peace of work, Nessa its so well done, you've added plenty of fresh delightful flavour to the site and its so well thought out, very tasteful.
Corinna |
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Re: prideful arrogance
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by spooky on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 04:36:47 AM AEST
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| beautifully written, with stenght and heart,a friend in words,,spooky |
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by Overstated on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 03:55:58 PM AEST
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| wow cant wait to read over the rest of your poems if this is anything to go by!!! terrific write well done!! |
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Re: prideful arrogance
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by Merry on
Tuesday, 18th May 2004 @ 06:35:27 PM AEST
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Brilliant!!!!!! This is such an artistic piece of work - unique and with your signature ladyfawn style!!!!!!
Hugs
Merry |
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by JennyFruFru on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 07:55:24 AM AEST
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| i really enjoyed this poem especially the layout with the pics that was very clever of you... reading this makes me feel a bit different from everyone else who commented... this poem makes me sad.. it reminds me of all this stuff that is going on with the war and beatings and killings of our solidiers and theres and it makes me sick.... world peace is a better way to go i think... but i still love your poem... |
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by twinkletoes on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 05:06:50 PM AEST
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Without a doubt, Henry Lawson is my favorite poet in the entire whole world. This comment will not do what you have achieved here any justice Nessa.
Parody is one of the most important skills in poetry (i feel) you have not taken anything from the original poet's intentions but have carried on a beautiful engagemnet of mirth, candor and very skillful fingerpointing. The use of the original text within your parody was executed precisily and enhances your points I think. What else can I say? I love it, well done, a gold star? I hope ol' Henry is watching...
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Re: prideful arrogance
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by Archie on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 06:19:37 PM AEST
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| That is a grand poem, I liked the pictures too. |
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Re: prideful arrogance
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 21st May 2004 @ 11:08:32 AM AEST
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<~~~always the last to comment!!!! Grrrr!
How can I possibly top the truth of what all the others have said? Your determinatioin to get the truth across is as magnificent as the words that you convey! You put so much into your work, I only pray it returns to you one-hundredfold! As for the pics? (speechless)
What a woderful work of art you have created!
Angel always...godspeed...joni |
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Re: prideful arrogance
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by emystar on
Saturday, 22nd May 2004 @ 12:26:16 AM AEST
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U go girlfriend!
Only survivers can live in the country or forrest or whatever ya call it.
Heck girlfriend, If all food was lost in stores we could survive off the land and even grow our own veggies.
Bet cha even know how to can um up in jars for the winter.....
Every where I've been women like u-n-I were always in big demand.
so obviously there's one that don't think so huh? What to heck does he know?
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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by TheSpiritx on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 01:05:47 AM AEST
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Pretty good stuff... enjoyable reading and moving commentary.
Thanks for commenting on mine :) |
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by critterhideaway on
Wednesday, 28th July 2004 @ 01:57:52 AM AEST
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| Very well said to whoever thinks they are just a"click" better than everyone else. God made us all equal with all the same features, very good. Good for you!!! |
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