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Making Love to the Mirror
Contributed by
brigitte7735
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Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 09:17:52 PM in AEST
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Cautionary fables and fairy tale lies
Baptism by fire and a young thing cries
Such a pretty thing, kiss daddy goodnight
Mommy loves you, her paper doll delight
A paper doll, who's willed to come to life
Leave the room, close the door behind
Kiss your hand, but don't let anyone see
Now close your eyes and come kiss me
Albinos and demons attack your sleep
A cursed existence at a tender thirteen
Lolita's child, so poised and pristine
Dirty secrets hidden in a wax figurine
A Nigerian man visits your dreams
Bringing news of the world he has seen
Tears your flesh and ignites your skin
Licks your wounds, outside and in
Making love to the mirror embraces sin
The forbidden honey that lies within
Hourglass curse you pretend to despise
Lord and Master, a tyrant in disguise
Sleep on the floor right by his side
The masochistic pleasures you derive
Scream to stop, but he never will
Captivating thoughts haunt you still
Bloodthirsty man thrives on a kill
As right and wrong is warply instilled
Forgive us Lord, or so you should pray
Self-righteous souls command you obey
Whispered glances, a life of shame
Bleed your confession, accept the blame
Prove your faith, offer up your sacrifice
'You will be with him in Paradise'
Foolish youth, swallow your pride
Cut deep so your will can't survive
A stepford child, daddy's pride and joy
Loved again, as her mother's toy
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Re: Making Love to the Mirror
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by ShadowDaughter on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 09:27:03 PM AEST
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*jaw drops*
Amazing. Absolutely, utterly, completely, entirely (etc.) amazing. I can't say it enough . . . I'd been looking a few times to see if you'd posted any of your poetry after I saw some of your (really nice and undeserved) comments on my poems and was rather disappointed that you'd not yet done so. But this was entirely worth the wait.
So many lines jumped out at me . . .
"Mommy loves you, her paper doll delight"
"Dirty secrets hidden in a wax figurine"
"Hourglass curse you pretend to despise"
Just amazing. And I love the idea of fairy tale lies . . .
On the whole, this was powerful and emotional and painful and eloquent and (gotta say it again) amazing. If any of your others are like this, you have a definite fan here.
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Re: Making Love to the Mirror
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by JT on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 09:41:17 PM AEST
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captivating. there are some truly powerful phrases here. loved it.
keep em coming
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Re: Making Love to the Mirror
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by secretwind on
Thursday, 20th May 2004 @ 11:59:10 PM AEST
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| Bleed your confession accept the blame....wow the flow is so deep.Excellent write. |
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Re: Making Love to the Mirror
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by AnGeL_M on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 12:34:16 AM AEST
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Absolutely An Enjoyable Read Here !!!!!!
Thanks For Sharing :-) Keep Em Coming !!!!!
Hugs , Love & God Bless
LoVe - AnGeL |
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Re: Making Love to the Mirror
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by Vermillion on
Tuesday, 25th May 2004 @ 07:45:58 AM AEST
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words cannot explain who brilliant and wonderful that poem was. you have rendeered me speechless.The flow, the elligance,it captured my soul. you are by far the most talented writer ive seen in a very long time.
~Vermillion~ |
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Re: Making Love to the Mirror
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by Black13 on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 12:21:50 PM AEST
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This one reminded me of a chant to a beat older than time.
:)
Good write.
I enjoyed reading it and I am at a loss for things to say sadly.
Brilliant though. Absolutely brilliant. |
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Re: Making Love to the Mirror
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by forever_lonely on
Monday, 28th June 2004 @ 06:19:18 PM AEST
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Oh how glad i am too have been told of your talent, a very good good friend, who i believe you know oh to well dan recommended me to you, ive been out of the site of late and havent been keeping up, talking to dan he told me about your writing talent and i had to see it to believe it, oh and i believe it to the ends of the world and back this is by far one of the greatest pieces i have read in a long time, i love the structure and flow and it has such an amazing underlying tincture that just wants to make me scream that this could well be one of the greatest pieces on the site today, you will be hearing much more from me.
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Re: Making Love to the Mirror
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by Black13 on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 02:14:08 PM AEST
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I was bored and I was rereading many older ones. This one just hit me in it's fully power.
It's utterly amazing. So many lines...
I know I commented before but... Yeeesh. This was incredibly powerful and emotional. Nice. Very nice. |
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Re: Making Love to the Mirror
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Thursday, 26th May 2005 @ 04:39:24 AM AEST
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| wow, AMAZING write! well done |
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