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My Maundering Mind
Contributed by
liquidsunshine
on
Saturday, 29th May 2004 @ 02:24:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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~Introduction~
My marbles mosey round
Inside my mind
And they maunder
As I muse and
Thoughts are mined.
~*~
~Setting~
A brook
Lolls
Cascades
Tumbles
Polishing stones
Contouring sediment
Lazily floating along its curves
The trees
Apple trees
Their leaves a striking green
With tiny delicate flowers
Pastel pink and blotchy white
Their branches overhanging
A graceful arch
The sky
A bright pale blue
Peeking through the crannies
A watercolor window
Defining the hours
For me
The sun
Breaking through
Shedding light
Casting a warm spell
Enchanting me
Embracing me
With only
The help of the sultry wind
That breezes by
Refreshingly
~*~
~The Story~
On these mossy banks sit I
Each breath circling to sigh
First, I stare at lazy stream
Pondering my pretty dream
Current flows in gentle rush
I relax in grass so lush
In my musing, I roll over
My heads pillow is sweet clover
Looking up to find stained glass
Of the leafy overpass
One small starlet wavers down
My brow furrowsthoughtful frown
I watch the flower stop, alight
Water ripplingsoft delight
Ripples steady, sunlight shimmers
I reflectmy eyes blue glimmers
Suddenly a duck stomps through
Quacking, loud, obnoxious too
The duck spoils my sweet savory ripples
And my thought train swiftly cripples
I get up and walk away
Knowing back again Ill stray
~*~
~The Meaning~
My mind drifts to thoughts of love
How I long to fall in deep
Or if I cant do that now
I want someone who can try
Someone wholl come awfly close
To hold my hand, praise my eye
Someone my heart would allow
Someone I could closely keep
One my brain wont bar and shove
~*~
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2004-05-29 14:24:28]
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Re: My Maundering Mind
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by Vermillion on
Saturday, 29th May 2004 @ 02:46:48 PM AEST
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wow. that was a poem of sheer genius it was so creative and cleverly crafted i am seriously impressed. keep writing!
~vermillion~ |
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Re: My Maundering Mind
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by reprobate on
Saturday, 29th May 2004 @ 03:24:28 PM AEST
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unique and innovative. really like it.
thanks for sharing |
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Re: My Maundering Mind
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by Archie on
Saturday, 29th May 2004 @ 03:48:32 PM AEST
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| Good poem, kind of reminds me of a well dreamt dream that is suddenly disturbed by a passing car. |
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Re: My Maundering Mind
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 30th May 2004 @ 12:57:57 PM AEST
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Beautiful! This one reminds me of Kie's poems. Which I greatly miss. But yours is a wonderful job.
I know the feeling of yearning for love! Strange, to want it so bad when we're not in love, yet when we are, we sometimes think of how much easier and more peaceful it was before! Strange we humans are.
Take care now. Love will come one of these days.
Andrew |
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Re: My Maundering Mind
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by eatfresh22 on
Tuesday, 1st June 2004 @ 04:46:37 PM AEST
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I love the imagery. I especially like the part about the sun....it warmed me! I love everything about this poem. The format was fun and I enjoyed the meaning at the end. It was such a relaxing read. You made my mind drift to happy places. Thank you!
~Carrie~ |
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