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Parting Passion
Contributed by
Soulless
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Saturday, 12th June 2004 @ 11:53:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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I find myself laying here once again Trying to keep my mind from leaving me Hiding from it all again Hoping and longing for the sky to greet me
A part of me grows in your hand A breath of my chest still escapes And floats into your grasp A lonely memory lingers in your life All I can do is watch you walk away Let part of me die away
Im left here, losing myself Drifting out this window Somehow I know Im only dreaming But will I wake before you go?
A part of me grows in your hand A breath of my chest still escapes And floats into your grasp A lonely memory lingers in your life All I can do is watch you walk away Let part of me die away
Once I stop watching I know My heat will be clouded And slip away to you Or have you held it in the shadow And all this time Ive known
A part of me grows in your hand A breath of my chest still escapes And floats into your grasp A lonely memory lingers in your life All I can do is watch you walk away Let part of me die away
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Re: Parting Passion
(User Rating: 1 ) by waos on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 12:03:35 AM AEST (User
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i like it, you did a good job writing it |
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Re: Parting Passion
(User Rating: 1 ) by carmen_queasy on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 04:48:18 AM AEST (User
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I was literally holding back tears reading that. It was great. I like the line "A part of me grows in your hand". It's a great line. Go you. |
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Re: Parting Passion
(User Rating: 1 ) by blueheart on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 08:41:32 AM AEST (User
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You always seem to do a good job in expressing your feelings and emotions. And you get better and better with every write. I too loved the line " A part of me grows in your hand". Superb. |
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Re: Parting Passion
(User Rating: 1 ) by Avarice_Riot on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 09:03:47 AM AEST (User
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Quite a sad poem, melancholy literally bleeds from it. Great work. |
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Re: Parting Passion
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kindredblood_dragon on
Thursday, 1st July 2004 @ 07:48:08 PM AEST (User
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You have a beautiful passion for creating such gripping images, awesome keep it up. |
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